Book of loyalty (destiny to heaven) - Reviews

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What you have so far is good! The plot is interesting. Love the way you started off with your story.

There's a few punctuation mistakes and grammatical errors but your story is still understandable. Keep up the good work!

It's actually very interesting. There's a lot of concepts and ideas going around. I personally liked how they both cheated on each other than after a moment of pride, they confessed. I also really like the poem. You should do more of that.
But please use paragraphs to make it easier for the reader to read. It looks disheartening, so probably a lot of people wouldn't give it a chance because of how gigantic the paragraphs look.

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Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact
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The writing techniques and the creation of characters is well planned as their names follows their characters, for example Bulelani it's a well pleasant  character which you can admire, he always gives good advises and he never said no when the main character is in need of a favour .