Keep in mind, I'm an extremely harsh critic, due to the massive amounts of novels I read. From the first sixteen chapters, I am already invested. The only problem likely is the lack of clarity revolving the personality of Alchemy. We need to see more social situations to amplify our understanding of her. Not to the point she's predictable, but to the point we legitimately love or hate her as an individual based on our own ideals and hers. My currently unofficial wife: Faded1Fate, I tell you this:Try to use her thought process to answer these questions to make her more vivid, some of have already been answered:Is Kill Or Be Killed a good concept? Would you kill before threat has been shown if you believe a possibility of damage could be demonstrated? What if someone isn't physically endangering the country, but instead destabilizing it? Would execution be an option? At what point would it be?Would you manipulate your allies for the sake of your people? What would be your reaction if you realize that one of your allies has overturned the alliance? What is your ideal partner? (Compatibility question, not legitimate romance)Could you be angered to a point of destruction? Would you mercilessly kill a nation if they left your nation on the verge of annihilation?Just how smart are you? Academically wise, logically wise, psychologically wise? (Academic refers to the subjects - math, science, blabla. Logically is using logic to decide things. Psychologically is manipulation, and using people)Are you afraid of your strength? Would you kill a former ally who's actively trying to kill you?
