It's too early to write a review about background or development and stuff(i gave them 5 kindly), yet i can say 1 thing. The grammar is unbearable. Physically hurts me to see all the errors, mispelled words(even in school, the misspelled words aren't that big of a deal until the mistake doesnt create a new word, with different meaning. Yours usually do. ), 0 sense sentences, absolute chaos in past sentences and other stuff... I am sorry mr. Author but i won't read this story till u edit it....
And you can't say i am mean, because i gave you a 4,2 blindly.