You are making story way worse by trying so hard.There is a good reason for so many similar novels to exist, because it works! Your starting template is similar to 'global lord' types, yet instead of following the fast paced formula, you write an extremely slow paced progression, which doesn't fit this sub-genre at all.Literally whenever ANYTHING happens, MC starts thinking about it for ungodly amount og paragraphs. Then he says something like "wait this is not important now