I read this up to chapter 13
I did not know what to expect when I read the synopsis, but once I read the story, it was pretty impressive. The author did an excellent job with writing on the world background. The description was good and vivid. The story definitely has potential.
I don't usually mind grammar and misspellings, but I hope the author can look at the punctuations. Also, some of the paragraphs were too long. It would be good if you can break them up into shorter sections.
Good luck, author!