I really like the story, it's entertaining and interesting to read. There are some awkward interactions between characters, some pieces of writing that don't seem to flow with the story. There is also an enormous amount of missing words, if the story was lacking in any way I would have dropped this before chapter two just because of how many times I have to guess what word should be where. It's like you didn't even bother to proofread this at all. How can so many errors be present in such a good story? So depressing.