Yin-Yang Child - Reviews

You have a good idea. I feel like I am not in the story. I am suggesting that you try to show instead of telling what characters are doing. here is websitehttp://***.wright.edu/~david.wilson/eng3830/creativewriting101.pdf

Boring, terrible character, world background sucks...................................................................................................

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On the other hand, The old man narrowed his eyes focusing on Mesa. The air around the child before him changed slightly and the way he walked toward the matron… with his decades of experience in his job, he could easily tell when people want to take life and child who was barely 6 years gave the same feeling. But he didn't stop it, he wanted to see what the child could do. Before the old man's eyes, Mesa hand extended toward the matron neck with a knife appearing in his hand, the old man eyes widened slightly. The child hid a weapon in his sleeve all the time but he didn't notice it.

[New bloodline acquired!]

"Jin."

"Kevin...."

She paused in thought, becoming motionless the way only the undead can; no sway, no eye movement, all the animation of a rock—until the spell collapsed with her next words.  "There's still four minutes until dawn, but I ought to get going."

Bro novel chapter is too short to enjoy the reading

Like a storytelling very interesting story

I love the story I dea and the mixture of culture, I look forward for more of your stories.