I really liked how there was the essence of everything I liked, just needed a couple more details to paint the environment(like when they were on the lump of flesh dragon passing through several countries while doing the deed it would be nice to hear about all the climates they’re passing through) , maybe a ting more detail when the mysterious magician loses her husband and kid, it sparked my curiousity as to why she was so cold, but the way it was worded about the lack of feelings in her eyes left too much out. Really can’t complain about anything because it covered all my core likes about LNs. The scene at the beach made me add to the library in preparation for all the exploring they’l be doing in an unknown world(s). You’ve got a great start and I know your writing will only get better.
