The storyline is pretty interesting. It's good, but the ending seemed a bit unfinished. However, it's a pretty good story overall. The only big issue to warn people about, and hopefully this gets re-edited; is the syntax. It causes A LOT of misunderstandings while reading. Pronouns, sentence structure and character names are all in a jumbled mess. Honestly if my brain didn't comprehend English sentence structures it would be hard to piece a lot of what is written into something understandable. If the story wasn't pretty good, I would have stopped reading. This definitely is worth a re-edit.
