This is one of the best Storys i have ever read on this app. The characters feel so genuine and refreshing its honestly amazing. The balance between the 2 protagonists characters and there romance is written to absolute perfection My only point of criticism would be this story would really profit from a bit of proove reading. Dont get me wrong it is by no means badly written, its just that sometimes there is a word too much or a Word missing etc. doesnt really effect the reading in any dramatic way tho.
This novel is much better than the last few mmo novel. Story is interesting but idk if it will be selected. Last few novels chosen from trial read has been trash. I don’t know how those trash with horrible ratings got selected. Qidian should actually read our reviews, but they don’t.
a huge waste of potential, I love the power the MC has, but like I said you wasted it on a psychopath, you could literally do anything with it but you just go with sadistic jerk who only live to find entertainment like an addict trying to find his next fix....Well good luck in you story with your psychopath of a MC.
I enjoyed the story up until he got the dragons. I quit reading because they were both girls. Of course his pets are girls, all story’s that have pets end up with having a girl pet who turns into a human form and then falls in love with the mc. Which turns the story into a harem. And unfortunately I don’t like harems.
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very nice novel, good start, great chapter lingth, promsing story, a cultivator in a mage world, would like to see more. now to the down side, hope other takes this a constrctive. 1. author tends to repeat things a bit, for example mc sais he likes something, then after saying he likes something, the author goes on to say mc sais he liked something bc he likes it. no need to say something and then go on to describe that he liked that thing, he already said so. but i admit it was more apprent in first chapters, it was a lot less in the middle chapters. 2. i would like more from the system, fir example he ask qustions, but we wtill dont know how to get SP, or how dual cultivation will work, does he need a skill book for that or just go at it, just more structer, and clearer progression path, as well as how he will devlope.
After 20 minutes of holding it up, he fell to the ground covered in sweat. He looked at his magic stat, 3.5>3.9. 'Wow, I didn't practice, heh.' He continued on to practice until his magic stat reached 4.3 and he could hold it for 40 minutes. He was dying inside and then collapsed. He caused so much commotion that the old man and the girl heard and went to take a look, and the emotion they saw on his face scared them. They knew that this was only defense, and didn't want to know what offense looked like. The old man and the black-haired girl slipped away before Divus noticed them. The girl felt slightly bad about graffiti on his face, which made her giggle the whole time with a seeming serious unaware of all the markers on his face. All the old man, Quintin, could do was nod his head, taking in on the prank as well.
