The story reads like an expanded outline describing a large amount of meaningless actions and thoughts of the MC. If you don't make your own logical leaps and imagine some other world you've already read about, then it's mostly a confusing and somewhat blank story. There's like 25-50% actual content and the rest of it is rambling nonsense about irrelevant daily actions like a kid telling their parent about their day at school. It's painful on the eyes. Every sentence is short. Each of those sentences is a tiny paragraph by itself with linebreaks. It is annoying. Also, it's written in first-person POV with thought bubbles mixed in which makes absolutely no sense when they're not head-hopping into psychic author territory. First-person POV is already that character's thoughts. Why get weird with thoughtception? It makes the formatting atrocious.
