Tale of MurkVeil - Reviews

The Story has a good flow with great and relatable characters with understandable relationships and the action scenes are interesting with excitement and flair

Garbage, i know we all use this word alot around here but my god i can't find any other word to describw this thing.The first 60-70 chapters were pretty fun to read and i though this would be the next system novel to pop off but then it was as if the author didn't want to write a system novel anymore and instead started a generic plot line about immortality, dude, i came to read a system novel, if i wanted to read a adventure novel i would just go re-read legend of the great sage.The mc is the plainest thing ever, no desires, no motivatoon, no real thoughts,  he just reacts to whatever happens in front of him,  the side-characters? what side-characters? completely forgettable.

It looks like I found the story that flows like brooks and not Yangze river or Yellow river. Centrally authors creativity doesn't flee like clouds and water,  story moves in repetitive way one hundred times slower then usual novels. It's to mysterious. Way to.

Okay, this novel is good.Why is that?Warning: Tiny minora spoiler ahead. Read at your own risk.Let me clarify something first in today's novels regarding this genre. Whether they are Japanese, Chinese, or original ones, they have cliches. The repeating happenings that it has becomes predictable and boring. So boring that reading the synopsis or the first chapter will make you lose interest.This one, this novel is a fresh addition because it has new gaming aspects told in a storytelling that will bait people to voluntarily go to the deepest layer of 'the abyss', LOL.Writing Quality:Storytelling factors such as the dialogue and information given in between isn't lacking or excessive. The cliffhanger is really good especially that first chapter. As per the basic requirement every author must learn, "show, not tell

It's not an easy case. An imbalance between gameplay and character world. I like the gameplay. I don't like reading about events outside the system.

Keep up the good work.....................................................................................................................................................................

The story has a decent premise but is totally destroyed by unbelievable details.Author please slow down.  Take your time.  There is no need to rush.  The numbers used are impossible to believe.  For example, the idea that only one person would spawn in a particular village out of 6 in the most popular game of its time is...hard to swallow?  The MC completes one relatively easy quest (done in under 30 seconds) to gain...about 5+ game changing and completely different rewards.  The entire world map is explored (except locked zones) by day 2 making this game incredibly small.  I could go on but I think you get the point.  There might be a real gem of a novel here as the basic premise is good.  However, I'll never know as all of the details are just so jarringly wrong that I am unable to keep reading this.  Author please consider finding an editor to help pick up on details like I mentioned as well as the frequent issues with grammar, especially punctuation.

As the writer of the book I will of course give myself a five star review :P.  Anyways i hope that you guys enjoy the novel please leave me any constructive criticism or  nonconstructive I can take it.  Have fun reading my novel and remember i hold all the spoilers he he.

still here sis and lil bro. will there be updates soon? what happening with the other story you was talking about??????????????????

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FIRST PARAGRAPH GOT ME HOOKED. I love this genre... I love the dystopian genre in general...Now I can see the clear reason this book clicked on me as soon as I read it. Kudos. Kudos. Kudos. Kudos to the author!

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