There are some mistakes, obviously, the most serious being that the boss and the other "people" are shocked and then find an absurd excuse for a "person" to knock down a tree with one blow. It needs romance, after all it is a vampire story. And I would really like it to have a development of creating a vampire kingdom/clan with the MC leading it. And obviously the MC finding a way to neutralize the weaknesses of his new race, that's the most obvious point. Anyone with 2 brain cells wouldn't want to lose control or have a lapse like an intermittent madman because of blood or something else.Final: Writing 5; Update 4; Story 4; Character 3; World 5...