Love the starting point and the way how the flaw and world building goes. Just on chapter 1 a bit slow pacing but if you are a person with good patience, surely you can get a hang of it, especially when the story is well written. That, being said this novel have a great potential with a slight improvement on punctuation, and paragraph placing, with slight tweaks. Everything will be smooth to go. I can see how hard the author create chapters to the story, as it was crafted with care, keep up the great work, author! To more ink!
