Before I get to reviewing this, let me preface this by saying that I still thoroughly enjoy reading this despite the brain-cells I lost. Now on to my review.TLDRvery nice story, with subpar writing and characters but is excellent for passing time. 1: Writing Quality: Let us be honest, the writing is garbage. The author jumps between tenses constantly and uses the same phrases over and over again. This sort of writing makes the story bland and often messes with my immersion. I would suggest the author to go and get an editor to help him proofread the writing. I don't mean this as an insult to the author, I very much like the premise of the story and I would love to see it executed well, writing-wise. 2: Stability of Updates: Not much to be said here, as I am not fully caught up. 3: Story Development: I love the pacing of the story. It very much complements the "War & Military" aspect of the story. I love Kingdom Building stories and I like when they are executed well. Plot wise and Pace wise, the author is doing a great job. 4: Character Design: I had this at 3 stars before but now I made it 2 simply because there is no one character in this story that is unique. I know this what you typically expect of a cultivation novel, but that should never excuse the author of falling into the same troupes. All, and I mean literally every last one of them including the MC, is one dimensional. Side characters that have no brain of their own: check, FL that is cold and strong at first, but turns into an extension of the MC with absolutely nothing to add: check, an ambitious MC that... you get the idea. Character Interactions: This is a part of character design, however it is highly dependant on how well the author designs the characters personalities and such. So when you have all the same looking characters you get the same character interactions at every turn. MC meets someone new, said person disrespects him, mc says or does something, said person is amazed. and just repeat the process. 5:World Background: The world has a very nice premise. It has been perfectly illustrated thus far. The rules of the world have also been stated, which means the various power dynamics are clear and make sense. This sets the stage for a very nice kingdom building developments. Nicely done.To be honest I wouldn't have written this review if I didn't believe in the potential of this story. And to the author, if you are reading this I would like to say the following. This is your story and as the author/ creative mind behind it. You have every write to explore. Don't bind yourself to the troupes and limits that have been set. Explore with your writing, experiment with the characters. Make them awfully cruel, kind, brave and cowards. Or a mix of all of these, because one characteristic can never describe a human being otherwise they turn into caricatures. Try to make the world move even if the MC didn't exist, cus right now it doesn't feel like that. All I want to say is, experiment and go wild with it. All the best.
