PenDragon's PicToStory Challenge - Reviews

I tried to understand what was happening in the story seems too all over the place with too many plots  and it gets confusing as the time goes couldn't even finish it I suggest to the author just read it find 1 plot then work around it its a good story but it's confusing

The story HAD SO MUCH POTENTIAL. The grammar was atrocious, the constant sentence breaks and inadequate/inaccurate dialogue dragged and made it difficult to read. It was a struggle.