Immortal Souls - Reviews

The genesis portrayed so well and have already give me the vibes from their fight. It's flow was quite interesting which give me insights as if I was the player, Vanessa. She looks cool and awesome. I wonder what else discoveries she'll find on the game...heh ^^

I need to improve my writing and the transitioning between characters and knowing when to stop and start sentences , over all I think the plot would be good because I have a plan but I need Improve on my writing style .

"Don't be so sure about that. After we tried once, we decided to not continue because we got wiped out instantly without even going further." Someone's eavesdropping.

here is a review.......................

"Of course, it still stayed."

The fall of the Sacred family was done in a fast and 'clean' manner.

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She'd found a small one that didn't look like it was frequented by celebrities. Without taking off her mask, she'd asked the hairdresser to cut off her long locks up to her shoulders. She'd been meaning to do that anyway, since her wavy hair looked much better short than overly long.

My mind was still in shock.

"Oh kau rupanya, tak sangka kau hidup lagi"

Only shooting stars break the mold

Author when are you releasing more chapters?