Hacked system - Reviews

I read until the first 15 chapters cause i couldn‘t handle it anymore. The writing is all over the place. Much happens but you can only really understand some parts cause the situations aren‘t really well explained. New progress to the story isn‘t slowly introduced but as a reader you just get thrown into it. *** for Author***In my opinion the idea of the story is great and has a very good potential. The only part thats bugs me is the writing style or the absence of any good structure in the chapters. The chapters only have a really rough structure like Beginning -> Action -> End of situation. Adding introductions or background information for new appearing characters or any real introduction for the story would probably be a good idea. There are almost no descriptions so the Tempo of the story is far to fast to get into it. And if there are descriptions they are all over the place and not really good integrated.As a reader I get the feeling that the beginning of the story is just written down without further thinking to get it to a point where the real plot should start. So I‘m dropping it since if I can‘t get into the beginning of the story there won‘t be a chance for the rest of the story.

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"That's a terrible idea," Sakura reprimanded. "Sensei, what do you think we should do?"

"Don't tell me that this is your first time to a cafe. Is it?"

We sneaked our way through the castle and after some time, we found a room, from which we could hear voices inside.

Observe - lv 2

I turn to look at the clock, 7:02. Two minutes late Sarah? Now you're just being ridicolous. Still can't let it get to me

[Lily: As the ball get- wait what?!]

"Isn't your personal usb the red one ?!The one you are holding right now ?!"

What I wanted was to talk and cuddle.

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