Note to the author, stating what was said or that something happened takes the effect and action out of the story. Details are your friend and will help your story. also have your characters actually speak instead of saying that they spoke about something, this will add life to your story.
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Over the next 4 hours, he found another 7 rabbits, earning him another 7 horns and 70 experience. He killed 3 with his dagger, and found they were pretty easy to kill, so he was glad. He needed 20 experience to level up, so he kept wondering around.
