Another Dungeon Report - Reviews

I like the way you start your book and so far it seems like an interesting plot. One thing to take note of is to check the punctuations of some of your sentences. Some of them should be split up in smaller ones and others would need some commas. Aside from that, the writing quality is good. I can't say much else as you only have two chapters so far, but I'll keep on reading when you update more. Keep up the good work, author!

The story is good but the 'I' turns off my mood

No humans could access it.

Twinkle and his teammates had moved to their first farming location.  They had spent the first part of the game creating awesome great and now it was time to level up.  Most players were level 3 or 4 by this point so at level 0 they had a lot of catching up to do.  

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"the assistant is fine but the CEO is in coma.... "said Mike.

Is killing an old nosy lady in your mind a criminal offense ? i hope not cause i am about to do one ! "

She was looking out of the bus window with strange feelings because according to her everything should have been destroyed but to her surprise everything was like before, like nothing happened.

For Readers:One of the key things that you will need to know about my writing is that it is a Folklore-Asian storytelling in English hybrid that focuses on the immersion and feelings rather than strict grammar buildings.The focus of this writing is to make an animation like a scene in a movie when reading, and many people I have found (locally) are an ace to think about it fastly. So I hope that you (Non-Asian) people will do the same as well and ignore the writing if you think that what I have done is 'incorrect grammar practice'. (Unless it doesn't make sense at all, in which we could have a discussion about it)Because it is intentional, as it was used to give you a show rather than a tell, like an anime scene! In which I also took an onomatopoeia to give you the scene immediately.And also, just read until chapter 8, I guess that is the point where you can decide whether this novel is worth the shot or not.Either way, I hope you will like this series and imagined it like your watching an anime!Im really hoping this would be an anime aswell!This novel is really suitable for fans of...Attack On Titan, Frieren, Berserk, Fullmetal Alchemist (though this show is too dark), Overlord, Jujutsu Kaisen, and many more that are killer in plots and worldbuilding!(Picture below is The Main Character of The AHTK series, Frenire Rothdell)