2.1 | Vishal and Layla - Reviews

this story has been completed but where is the full story ???

I'll be honest, but the first initial chapters were a bit of a struggle to read. Maybe because of the grammatical mistakes and misuse on tenses and adverbs. Not to add, I noticed that the author tends to be redundant too. And that made my eyes feel tired. (Imagine reading a paragraph that repeated the word "kill

Aunque al principio era muy tedioso al leer pero desde el cuarto capitulo fue mejorando está que lo leí en un día los 58 capitulo y me quede con deseos de mas

I think your writing is pretty good, just a couple of complaints and that is in the translation, confusing genders.  I may suggest that you get an editor to assist you. I am at chapter 12 and the story line is very good. I sincerely hope you do not decide to drop the story.

IT is a very interesting start, The way the main character first gets his game system is interesting and I'm happy for once, that the girl isn't a complete scumbag like in most stories. The grammar is strange in places, but you can tell this is from someone who's English is their second language and it's great and still readable and enjoyable.

"E-ego?! What do you mean?!"  Casia sounds insulted by that.

Well the years start coming and they don't stop coming

I have to say that this book isn't bad at all. Like the idea of having the MC be a bit different from the usual MC's we see, in terms of race. It's a breath of fresh air. I also like how the conversations flow. The dialogue between the three friends make the book a but more lively, so that's another plus... Now for the cons... There's a lot of unnecessary info being dumped in all at once, especially in the first chapter. There are minor grammatical errors that can't be noticed easily and more than a few punctuation errors. The Way it is written in first person is also a big turn off for me (personal issue). It think the story would be better if told in third person. Overall, is till think this is a good one, as it is very comfortable to read. 4.0/5.0... ?

Different from what you usually find her. The start is dark, and by the time you realize what's happening, you are invested in the story and the style. The author uses colorful language, which might be hard to read if it's not your first language, but very enjoyable.