Okay, I read some chapters but for some reason, I cannot establish a clue about what your story is really about.
TLDR, here are my strengths and weaknesses for your novel.
Strengths: Unique genre. Good representation of the premise.
Weaknesses: No knowledge of plot structure. Lack of description of what the story is all about along with scenes.
I know for a fact that this novel falls under the sports genre, so I was expecting fast-paced action scenes of the players or something similar. I didn’t see any of it in the first chapter.
I suggest describing the scenes (for example, describe the office’s appearance) and adding context to your chapters. When making chapters, there needs to be an objective of what you are trying to portray to the audience.
You need to convince people to read your book.
I tried to understand some characters, like Jeff, for example being the boss, but for some reason I cannot flip the page because I keep reading scenes without any context of what it is all about.
Also, please improve your book title, so I can have a clear picture of what your book stands for.
I appreciate your desire to represent the world of sports in novels, but for now I just can’t read the rest of it because of it lacking a clear foundation of what it is about.
But you shouldn’t give up. Sports isn’t my thing, but knowing you want to represent it through your novel is making me want to read more. That is, if you revamp/rewrite your book.
Good luck on your writing journey by the way, and feel free to message me in the forums should you have any questions.
A fun read. An interesting world setting with all the different kinds of fantasy thrown in. Minor grammar problems.
Bro author I have been giving you all of my power stones in hope that you won't drop this novel. Please Update , I really like this one .
First let me say this,
I HATE NTR WITH MY LIFE!!!
THIS STORY IS GOOOOOD
MC OBVIOUSLY ISNT NORMAL IN THE HEAD
AND ONCE AGAIN I HATE NTR WITH MY LIFE!!!!!!
But still 5 stars
Let's take in a junior sister, so far our life has been to steady
I'm just voting meh.
Hey webnovel NEWSFLASH your readers who are almost exclusively Non-chinese don't appreciate Chinese Nationalism and racism. Baffles me how they let these kinds of novels through
Awesome! Awesome! Awesome! Awesome!
Io started it thinking it was just another virtual reality thing without any sort of appeal, but it turns out it's a totally different story with unusual development and great, great - did I say great?- writing and good character design.
The world building starts and develop relatively slowly but you will almost never want to skip a paragraph, so I can't say it's really slow (unless you don't like the few '****-romance' dialogue between protagonist and girlfriend, which, however, I think are extraordinary well written for a novel)
Tu sum it all up, awesome! Keep up the good work, author!
Why are the chapters deleted. The story had a good start and I was hoping for this to become one if my regular novels. Are you gonna re-upload the chapters?
This review is written after reading the latest chap at this moment. (Chapter 7)
I'm not the type of person who casually gives a half-hearted review to please others and I'm brutally honest about it... Perhaps...
Anyway, the writing quality is quite good and there were no major mistakes that could take one away from their reading immersion aside from a few tense shifts. But the latter can be worked on through editing.
5 for story development. There were no forced interactions and everything seemed logical so far. Just that, the gods felt so weak in my opinion.
Characters aren't fleshed out yet and this might be because of the lack of chapters. This includes the MC himself. <- This opinion may change depending on how the author approaches this point.
Update Stability 5
Aside from the characters, the setting wasn't properly explained yet. Again, this might be because of the lack of chapters. But the good thing is that I can see development in this area.
All in all, this book has the potential to reach top 100 for originals (based on my experience). Only of course, if the book manages to get its well-deserved attention.
Freakquency is a slow start novel, you may be turned off from the confusing beginning, but stick with it and the writing quality and the mystery will begin to hook you
this is a spectacular book and it gave me a look into what my book was missing. i want to thank the author for giving me the inspiration to pick up my pen and write harder to improve and show that maybe make it to the top