the story goes too slow.... not for me so i drooped it .. but the story got a good flow and indeed its a hidden gem.. just not suited for me.. or any other who don,t like slow development pace story ...
Despite the MC having no magic core, he didn't give up and keep training his Will so that he can fulfill his wish...F*ck this....140 characters!!!!!
possibly good story ruined by a bad translation, you might get your brain mesh trying to comprehend this.
Shamless review from Co-Author- the grammer may be...debatable but I think the over all world and overall story is grate, and just a little note, the first 100 chapters is only the beginning and its him just messing around and having fun in a way while both me and Eve(Author) find ways to torture the Mc for fun, but after that it gets more serious and detailed in a way that you wouldn't of expected from us, so consider reading are completely free novel and we hope you enjoy...also Eve is garbage at Grammer so thats were I come in as the Co-author/editor and also main character plus system Ai.hope you enjoy - from Co-author Jonathan
Cons: The grammar is horrid and is almost nonexistent, a few characters feel unnecessary and I just hate even if they have a purpose, such as the sister. She might give the MC a purpose, but it's bad if I hope she dies in every single chapter she is in. The novel uses a ridiculous amount of cliches and is like I said, inconsistent. For ex. in one of the early chapters which was a small example, The notification literally notified him it was nora in front of him but he asked himself where nora is (as if she's not there). Also in one chapter the author forgot to add a description of a class and said they would as soon as possible, its been a month since. The rules that the author makes are inconsistent for example at one point the MC sadly states he can't use a spear because he's a warrior, and then comments right after that classes can use any weapon. Then a few paragraphs later he begins using a spear which I don't know how he has, because according to him warriors start with a sword and shield. He then instead of being a warrior becomes a mage, which is acceptable, but using the very same logic from earlier he shouldn't be able to use a spear but does. Pros: The story seemed bearable and maybe a decent read if the grammar was fixed. Not too many here. Giving it two stars because it actually kept me reading like 5 chapters.
Hello, fellow author. I'm going to give you some constructive criticism. 1: Please show what's happening in the story more. •In your story, you tell the reader that the character feels a certain way. Ex: "He felt confident." Here's an example of showing your protagonist's confidence."He raised his chin high, looked his opponent in the eye, and smirked." You can increase your word count if you explain each emotion. And your readers can immerse themselves better. 2: Please don't repeat the same information twice In the same chapter. •This disrupts the reader's immersion in the story. •I know it helps add word count, but that frustrates readers. 3: Your grammar needs some work. It's hard to immerse yourself in a book if there are many grammatical errors.
i like this story a lot hehehe ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
It's well written and an amzing novel! Cant wait for more chapters author, keep it up like you always do. I recommend you all to read it for a great time and add it to library to keep updated on these very nice chapters. Great start!
If you want to read a story that slowly builds up tensions, has an actual plot that builds on itself and a powerful world building series that tackles cultivation in a unique way then I would highly recommend this
well one word . if you are a masochist, wants to be mentally tortured this is for you!!! this is the first time ii m going to do a bad review and did not even last 2-3 chapters . the story has a lot of potential especially in world building but bro!!! you gotta ruin it with the mc stupidity ! might as well make him normal teenager not reincarnator. mc is projecting the character of a loser and you are telling me he is a young paragon it past life? i am not gonna continue reading this but for those who are curious check till the end . the only advantage here is the update stability and potential world background .
I have read some of its chapters and ........the result was what you would expect from a game system novel. It starts with Mc being sent to another world and he gets a system. but as he was weak as a worm in that world so the system gave him so much pleasant surprises that even I was shocked....he was given an ability to escape 5 km in an instant. then he levels up because of assuming a haughty pose before two experts....weird, right? but the story is all about the Mc acting tough and I like that as it is a little out of the box thinking by the author......and I wish that this novel comes out soon.
The story's basically combining a number of systems to create one system that provides basically everything to the MC without him having to really do anything. It's also got the usual cliche super handsome MC, but made worse by the MC being a complete idiot who blanks out on noticing there's a girl with him, and also who responds to someone attacking him and trying to kill him (and straight up telling him) with confusion and, again, blanking out. He also constantly gets lost in his own head, where the author takes time to dole out exposition in situations where he should really be focusing on what's in front of him. I don't expect a hypercompetent MC, but I'm certainly not interested in reading about a mentally challenged, milquetoast of an MC who behaves like he's never held a girl's hand before.