Hidden gem!! The main character is one of my favorite parts—he starts off a bit naive, but it’s been so rewarding to see him grow and improve through his experiences. The writing is great, and while the story and world weren’t explored much at first, they’ve started to open up in really exciting ways. I can’t wait to see where things go next! Plus, I really appreciate that it’s free—thanks author!
Leo left the third floor of the library. On the second floor, he saw someone he recognized, Aaron. He was sitting cross-legged with a book in front of him. Leo walked out of the Library and was heading straight to his room to process most of the events that had happened to him. Immediately he got out of the library, Anderson lazily walked up to him and said
Author don't drop this, This is good, I like tge premise, it's still early to give a real review, but it gives me high expectations
the writing quality is a perfection even the grammar the story was unique including the skills he the main character have even the story development is great looking forward for more chapters
please read this novel once and give me your full support
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The mc is way too dumb for me. all the desicions he makes are so stupid that it makes me want to strangle him. Read to find out if you like it or not just my opinion.
If you’re expecting a badass cool or smart mc turn around the mc is usually lead by the nose and abused by all the women and he’s usually blushing and stuttering from them even tho he’s 30+yrs old so it leaves a rather creepy taste the mc appears to be a lolicon but all of this doesn’t completely ruin this story as long as you go into this with a light heart and don’t take it to seriously you should be fine I’m going to continue reading this in the hope that the mc grows up more and hopefully becomes a man fingers crossed
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Well...I don't know what to say other than this story is a grammatical nightmare. It's just...sigh. The premise is beautiful and I guess you can ignore the errors if you like it enough but...well. You really should work on your pronouns in particular. Just to clarify, for a woman is used /she/ and for a male /he/. Always. No exchange between the two can occour. Not only that, you also fill the chapters with unneeded info, throwing up facts left and right, making it a boring read. Is the reason why I only gave you 3 stars for world background. It's not that you did not develop it, it's just that...you didn't really fit it very well in the story. You should try to integrate your info more with the flow of the story, revealing smaller bits in more points. There is no need to dump everything on the readers at once, it only stops the flow and few people will read those added parts anyway (like i did) which is a pity.Aside from those points it's a beautiful story, I liked it. You probably should just think more about editing your chapters rather than postin them quicker, really.Anyway, I hope I didn't offend you with my comments and that instead they could be of some help to improve your writing style.
only read upto 6 chapters good story until now and for those who have knowledge on mahabharat can only understand this but you can see it as fan fiction mahabharat