Sorry but I read the first few chapters and this wasn't very good. I sort of like the premise but it doesn't feel like the author wants to take the time to actually think about or write a story. Just look at how it starts. We don't get a chapter about the mc's previous life. We don't get one about him getting his system. We don't get a chapter where he makes a serious attempt to recruit people that wasn't moronic and obviously going to end with cops chasing him (He actually needs a mental hospital if he thought recruiting small children in front of their school was a good idea, regardless of whether his cultivation is real.) We don't get any explanation for why he thought that was a good idea or why he was that desperate outside of what we know from the summary. We don't get any real comedy that wasn't just rehashed from the summary. All we get is MC tries to kidnap children and doesn't get arrested for some reasonMC laments his incompetenceMC eavesdrops on old manMC tries to convince old manOld man agrees out of pityThe premise is fun like I said but it feels like the author is putting the minimum amount of effort into the actual story. I thought maybe it would get better in the next chapter but the author didn't even want to write about the MC finding more students. Instead for some reason the old man calls a bunch of his friends over so that the MC, and more importantly the author, don't have to put even a small amount of effort or thought into that issue. Then in the third chapter the MC gets clones who can cultivate for him so he can continue to put no effort into life. It's like the author's laziness is infecting his character...
Cover: 5/5, The cover edits is really amazing. One glance and I can already tell how much effort went into.Synopsis: 4/5. Although there are some info dumping in the synopsis, I was able to tell what's going on and what the story would be about.Grammar: 5/5. Grammar wise, this novel is so much better than 90% of the novels in here. There aren't any sentences in this novel that would suddenly changed it tenses midway so I'm happy about this.Writing: 4.5/5. Story wise and the writing structure is mesmerizing. I have been thoroughly impressed by author's unique way of storytelling and I can't wait to read more.Overall: 4.8/5. Would I recommend this novel to you? The answer would be yes and you should read it to prove my review right.
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I love the history. The autor os the better. I think this history os the next Supreme magus in the webnovel.I love the history. The autor os the better. I think this history os the next Supreme magus in the webnovel.
to translator: I hate when I am about to hug someone really sexy and my face hits the mirror.
story: Our language is called the mother tongue because the father never gets a chance to Speak, that Is, very nice
Character: When I joke they take it seriously. When I am serious they take as a joke..
updatig stability: I don't know!
world background: What kind of place is this? It's beautiful: Pigeons fly, women fall from the sky! I'm moving here!
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Wow, one of the better novels in all of WN most recent picks. It's a 'Transmigrated with a System' story but the focus on the system is very minor, so far I think there's been less than 200 words regarding the system. The type of system is also one that's entirely hands off, allowing the MC to actually have a life and further the plot without referring to it every three paragraphs.
As for the MC, we finally get an intelligent, down to earth character that actually thinks before he acts rather than arrogantly throwing his ill-gotten power around and stomping on everyone. The MC plays the part of a wastrel third son of the powerful prime minister but does it in such a way that the readers dont just hate his guts and want to punch him in the face.
As for the side characters, they actually show some depth and ambiguity. His father is intelligent, highly capable and kind hearted, but he purposefully fosters an image as a cold hearted and greedy official so as to not threaten the emperor and bring trouble on his clan. So much different than those of similar stories that will already be planning rebellion within the first 5 chapters rather than just moderating their actions.
The Emperor is appropriately mysterious, being more than the arrogant, almighty figure we see in these novels. Even 39 chapters in I still cant say how much he knows, or how he really feels towards the MC and his dad.
The female lead isnt the Mary Sue type I was expecting either. Yes she's a talented Martial artist and a competent general despite her young age, but those can all be expected given that her father is a great general and raised her in that manner. Despite this, she also shows some flaws and a believable lack of competence when she tries to deal with the city guard the same way as with soldiers on the battlefield. Also rather than the author dancing around the issue and having both her and the MC be ignorant of the others feelings, they both quickly realize that neither want to marry the other and actually talk things out before agreeing to somewhat work together on the matter.
All in all, these first 39 chapters have been beyond excellent and I hope it keeps that way after the story is picked up.
I'm hooked for the couple of chaps, let's see if I like it later on
This is a real gem here . The readers feels the emotional devloment of the mc and even in the first few chapters it really hits diffrent ..................
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This is by far my new favorite web novel on this site. The lead character is very interesting and he is very funny sometimes. Lots of action. I think he is going to uncover a lot of mysteries in this new world. I am excited about it.