Hey there! Author here.
I just wanted to thank everyone who give this novel a try.
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This is a story about, Ziro Edens, who had everything one would need in life. His father was a multi-billionaire tycoon, and his mother was a queen of the country. He was intelligent, athletic, handsome, and the crown prince who would soon become the next king.
He had a childhood friend whose beauty could rival any princess. There was nothing more he needed in life, and he just wanted to spend the rest of his life in peace with his childhood friend— whom he loved with all his heart.
One day, after receiving an anonymous call, he lost everything and later disappeared. But his childhood friend never stopped searching for him.
After a year, he walked into the classroom to attend the class, and everyone else in his school acted as there was nothing wrong. Later, his childhood friend found out the world’s time had reverted back to the day Ziro received the phone call, and she was the only one who had retained the memory of the previous timeline.
MC (Ziro Edens) is a Male.
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Great story.
The plot is very nice
The character design is almost perfect because of the mixture of teenage experiences.
I think you must also make the character tougher to help with his development.
The grammatical errors are alittle too much!
Make sure to edit your story before you post them.
However, your story is very nice and even though I don't really like martial arts stories, yours is the first one I really like.
Keep I up!
Review time, 7 chapters. (For those who need it)
I am honestly disappointed. The sypnosis seem interesting and well, it kinda disappointed me.
Like the sypnosis said, the mc needs to create wonders. But it's just blueprints from the system. It automatically create auspicious effects. The only people who believe in it are his own sect disciples so there is no actual story behind everything.
All what the mc need is materials and the system will create effects for the wonder he creates. Then because the disciples believe in him, the mc gains the abilities in the said wonder. Very disappointing.
World background is the same as any cultivation novel.
Translation Quality: 5* (as always)
SoU: 5* (as always)
Story Development: 2*
Character Design: 2*
World Background: 2*
Overall score: 3.2
Personal score: 1.5
Story has lot of potential , it's one of a kind novel,I'm looking forward for the upcoming chapter.
ALL THE BEST
It's a good book but It doesn't have many chapters yet so I cant really talk about update stability or world/character development but I will say its a good story that reminds me of The Snake Report and Tales of the World Devouring Serpent the only issue is the grammar which the author is getting better at after each chapter so overall its a read.
found it quite cringe, unoriginal and just boring
it is too slow for my taste
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Actually really good story. There doesn't seem to be any action so far but I think its better that way. . .. . ... . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . .
I always leave writing quality at four for anyone because you should always strive to be better. It's nothing personal. Your education as a writer is never finished. Other than that it was nice to read a coherent story, that made sense and I could follow.
Hey!
Good day to you! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email mollyringdom*@*gmail.com (delete *）We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). Looking forward to your email.
Its good .
Very good and descriptive! I love the way you started the novel with “A meaningless war” or smth like that. Also, your word-building is nice, I like it a lot! The plot already is intriguing and the book itself from the first phrase. Keep up the good work!