Since this story is about to get buried in Webnovel I figure I'll write my first review ever. Hopefully it will be found and picked up later.
It's 5 stars because it has a solid premise and also has potential. I'd honestly give it 4 stars based on what is shown as of the 36 chapters here, but 99% of people seem to have a pass or fail type of rating system so I can only adjust it in the future so as to not harm the novel.
For those purely desiring an overpowered system, an OP mc, a pet taming, or an extremely fast paced novel where the MC is already in core formation or tier 3 power in less than 40 chapters... this novel isn't for you. For those who want a slower paced novel (built for a 1000+ chapters easy) with a lot of world building and some hardships where the mc is actually shown to struggle.. the target audience is somewhere in this group. This story reminds me a bit of the earlier translated web novels from when translating xuanhuan and xianxia web novels started to blow up, albeit not quite at their level yet.
Now, the synopsis and title may be a little misleading, but I'd still say the story so far has been oriented around the mc's clan. I am interested if it will be like this in the far future of the story though, as it seems hard to maintain since mcs usually grow too fast for their clans to keep up without what are basically cheats, so 99% of the time they get left behind. His smartphone thankfully isn't too overpowered yet and only has 2 of the functions listed as of chapter 40. Granted, the trading currency for spirit stones seems extremely broken so I kind of hope he never gets that one.
The story also "skips time" pretty frequently, but it at least makes sense. In a story of immortal cultivation where the mc is cultivating at a fairly normal pace that's bound to happen as there will be lots of downtime. There is a decent amount of explaining and world building, especially at the start, which I know can turn people off.
Lastly, the author is trying to give the idea that the mc is a normal cultivator struggling with his path to immortality. Alas, he is still an mc with a couple cheat codes that give him an edge.
Overall, the story has potential and hopefully the author can grow with this one. It is a tough writing style/novel to attempt and it's not for everyone to like.
This novel has potential! Please, Please" do not drop this,
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This story is wonderful! If you love TRPGs you should get a kick out of this. Just try to leave your preconceptions of a fantasy world behind. Some common stereotypes fit, while many are lacking. The author does a wonderful job of world building, and an even better job of balancing humor and cold violence. the only part of this i even thought about not giving full marks too is writing quality, and only because there were a few minor typos through out. After thinking more I decided that there is only so much perfection you can expect from a novel published on a daily basis with no editor. All in all a perfect web novel and one I am willing to spend all my coin on. Death to the enemies of Invictus!
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The plot was interesting and great. great characters development. This web novel is amazing. keep up the hard work, author........................
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Horrible. While the idea behind the story is sound, the grammar makes it hard to get into. I mean, how can you constantly go back and forth with he and she? And not realise that you're doing it?
Great concept and great world building. Your writing style fits into the Webnovel platform great and it's honestly a shame that you haven't gotten as much publicity as you deserve, even if it is a fairly new novel.
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I'm pretty satisfied with my work since it reached its goal, making me happy and cope with the harsh reality. I think it's pretty decent for my first work (It's actually the second but since it's a reboot of the first, I consider it my first work). Overall, I think it's good enough.
I loved the start of the story and thought it was a great begging. But, as I continued to read up till the 200th chapters I found myself growing to dislike the Mc. For me he started feeling like a side character with no growth. Also, he is being more passive than anything right now and the fls feel like jerks. They left him all alone as soon as they got to the city basically and everyone just makes fun of him a lot. I am hoping that something changes to where he finally mans up a little a start taking more charge instead of stumbling around following the fls who treat him like air.
When I first started reading Webnovels, this quickly became one of my favorites and then it was dropped and now I see it again it has over 500 chapters. .. ????????ty author