well you are an heiress good for you doesn't really matter
As always it is good and curiousty increases for next chapter
Ah I see... a fellow nepali on this community.Well, as we're from the same country, it's only natural to support another author here.Good Luck!?
Hope that you don’t drop this novelAnd release the chapters as soon as possible
The writing quality is actually pretty high in this book, cant say much about world building as it just started but. It seems promising. Now a few tips that i think could help are that, you probably shouldnt add any type of romance. With it not really making sense as the Mc is another species. And dont add a female Paragon as it will just feel forced andruin the story. Also dont make the protagonist a hero or antihero that tries to save the world. Because i feel like its getting over used and wouldnt match the Mc personality. Now he dosent have to be a villain either. He could just be willing to do what it takes for his goal.But overall i like where the story is going.??
All you have to do is edit a little bit.
"The Issei I knew wouldn't do stuff like this…" Gabriel said truthfully
"More! Jester! More!" Dark shouted.
Never! Never! Never! Never! Never!
"O ..."
"Tuanku…" Ollie melakukan etika mudah sambil sedikit berbelah bahagi, "Tuanku Ivan…"
Mereka disebut api bumi dan api surga.