really good story
author pls upload more chap like 1 chap a day (that's the norm)
this book will definitely get way more popular if u upload more
At first the story seems interesting but the more you read, you realize that the plot is just follows the same old sign-in type novels routine.
this series written by some one
translated by some one
copy and pased by some one
put Author name is: Tushar_Vashishta (fake author) what shame
today google translated every where
so i can post what every what i like ? with translated?
this series already over at china
this series title is zhaohuan wansui
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the book really good
This is a review after reading 52 chapters of the story.
The story is, like the title suggests, a cultivation story with a system.
Now, what I like about the story.
Pros :
1. The first person narrative that author uses. It’s extremely unique in cultivation novels which are usually done in third person. Refreshing for those that want to try a cultivation novel written in a different way than others.
2. Writing quality is excellent, I mean, there are no glaring flaws. That’s already an up as that’s all you really need. Author is pretty experienced, so this is to be expected.
3. Update stability is great, so that’s another major plus for the story.
4. Although MC has his flaws, what Mc has no flaw? The flaws are there to make us readers symphatize with the Mc and watch him grow. The longer we read, the more we see him fix his flaw and slowly mature into the ’ideal MC’
Cons :
1. MC relies too much on his system. Yes, it’s a system story, and I also get that one should exploit a cheat once they have it, but Mc needs to also learn to be more independent and instead of asking system all types of questions that he probably knows the answer to, ask more thorough ones that we readers don’t already know.
Of course not all of the information is useless as there is a lot useful one, but it can be a bit tedious.
Perhaps skip all those unecessary words by writing something like, ‘MC for the next hour or so asked MC all sorts of questions. Dumb as some of them were, he wanted to get everything straight, not missing anything out. After all, just a single detail could cost his life.’ Makes the MC look smarter and skips a lot of unecessary information that can be spread throughout the chapters.
2. This is more of a personal preference, but in first person narrative, I feel like the paragraphs are a bit too chunky. Can be cut shorter to be more pleasing to the eyes. (Just my personal preference.)
3. MC can be a bit indecisive at times, but that’s normal, jn fact, this is not even a con, I’m just putting it here in case Author forgets that character development exists. I get that MC is in an unfamiliar world, but CD is very important, don’t forget this.
Well, that’s all from me. Although it looks like there are more cons than pros, most of the cons are just my suggestions to author on how he could develop the story for future continuity.
Those flaws can easily be fixed and contribute to future of the story.
Good story, would recommend.
Great work. Just need more frequent updates....... . . v..... . . .. . . . . . .. v.. . .. v.v.. v.. . .. . . . . . .. . . . . . . v.v... . . . . . .. . . . . .. . . . . . . .. . . . . .. .. . . . .. . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . .. . . . . .. . . . . .. . . . . .. . . . .. . . . . . .. . . . . .. ... .. .. . .. . .. .. . . .. . .. . . .. .
First taboo: no matter how beautifully written, don't let description bring your narrative to a halt. The author of a novel must keep this in mind: don't over-describe anything, whether it's the Tetons, the sunset, or the zebras on Waikiki Beach. Otherwise, the strength of your narrative is going to suffer.
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It's a story with potential. The pirates theme is very interesting and not something very explored. It's nice to see someone telling a story like that.
Despite this, I believe that the author needed to make readers know the protagonist more. He spent many chapters explaining and showing the prison break and when he barely starts to show the mc path, his choices and personality construction... Locked Chapter. Most of what I saw was tragedy after tragedy happening in Shiro's life.
For me, it needs more for people to decide whether or not to continue reading the story. Not much to say based on the free chapters. It just has a lot of potential. The world, the monsters, gods, powers, history... All of this can be very good but you couldn't see it in the 34 free chapters.
I wish the author success on this journey. I hope you do a good job. Peace!
The story is amazing, this power system is different and unique, makes me like it a lot, almost makes me want to write something similar, but credit is where credit is due, and nice job, I will be waiting for the next upcoming chapters keep up the good work!