Really like the story and the mc. The story does not entirely focus on the protagonist as other characters have their time to shine and get development. It is a light hearted novel for the moment and the sense of humor is totally my cup of tea.
NOTE THIS IS A CONSTRUCTIVE FEEDBACK REVIEW AND PROBABLY DOES NOT RELATE TO CURRENT STATE OF NOVEL
*I am not coming back to update the rating*
Ok, first of all you need to make your paragraphs smaller. You want your paragraphs as small as possible and seperate it by each time a new thought is started. There were litterally paragraphs covering my full screen on my phone, was worse than last review.
You need to read your chapters more before you publish them btw, you are missing some commas, and errors you didn't fix like first page ., You had that. For commas, you can try speaking out loud or in your mind SLOWER that way you can catch the pauses.
You need to put commas for but and and (most cases for and). Try to make some of your sentences shorter too. No reader wants to read a sentence that 5 lines long (on my phone). If you must make super long sentences, only do it like once a chapter.
Put a space after your ..... and also you cant out commas after that ......, You don't need to capitalize if you are still continuing the sentence, just delete the comma though if you are using that.
For things you aren't sure are right EVEN A LITTLE BIT just search what you wrote in google. like allright neesa a space.
Try not to use all caps a lot. Its rarely used ib writing for a reason, as it does not fit in almost all circumstances. If you use all caps, you should only use it for one line paragraphs, which willmostly be a scent, noise, etc. PAINNNN, AGHHH, BLOODDDD, etc.
Might be wrong about this, but I think lied is used wrongly (I think). For words that have the same sound to another meaning, ALL WAYS LOOK IT UP, too double check. Even if I'm wrong on that word, you should still do it.
Try to desribe 5 senses and emotions more too btw. The characters felt too 2D and unrealistic in their actions. Like parents seemed like they didn't care one bit other than the conversation. For example you can write "A air of gloom surrounded the table, his mom's eyes were souless, his dad started to be out of shape, growing stubs of facial hair." Make it more relatable.
Also this part is opinionated, but I feel you should change the synopsis a little bit. I just don't get the phrase, 'she was his ideal', like he loved her? He idoled her? idk don't get it.
I honestly couldn't read after C1 as I already wrote so much... I just skimmed C2 sorry couldn't finish it..
Because of this I made story development a 4 to not be biased as I haven't read enough. I marked 2 for updates as its not haitus but the speed is way too slow.
The story is interesting, although i would like to have longer chapters. This short chapters gives a feeling of discontinuity in the story. But the Novel has potential and i am curious how the author will continue it.
The story plot is awesome. As the name suggests the Hero is a curosity freak type character, something new that I haven't found even on Webnovel.
No noticable grammatical error or mistakes found good job author.
Better than the walking dead. I really like the parallels to the author's actual life. I must say, the sudden shift from third to first person was a bit peculiar. Overall, absolutely adequate.
I genuinely don't understand all the hype around this novel. I've only completely read through chapter 22 but I randomly unlocked and read further chapters to make sure I was only right about the early chapters. This book is a mess. Its background is completely unoriginal as is the world. The characters in the starting village are completely flat and lack reasonable personalities. In addition to the poor character writing the story is basically just a list in chronological order of what the mc does. The killer for me is that it is genuinely unreadable as the author makes mistakes every sentence and nothing flows correctly making the experience jarring and unpleasant.
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there is too much fake review, let me give you the real review it's a really boring novel, I tried to read it till 140 chapters, I even started to skip but it's too trash to read. by the way I read mtl of martial God space to 1800 chapter and that crappy google translation entertained me more than this novel. the MC is too fake, his speed talent and assasin path which where unique were lost as chapters progressed. he was gone for creating spaceship and speed racing, robot making in like first 150 chaptersI voted for this novel because of authors other novel, if you want to read a space adventure go and read galactic dark net it's a good one
This writer is a brazilian youtuber called "Zy" that was exposed a few months ago for exchanging nude pictures with an underage girl that was one of his subscribers. She was around 15. He's disgusting.
Is this novel ever going to be translated? It's a good novel.. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . .. .. . . . . . .
Let's say this first. In every Chinese novel there is face-slapping, in some more and others less, we clear? Yes, there happens to a lot of face slaps and most likely there will be a lot more.Ok, basically the mc touches beasts with his body parts and he will immediately know everything about the said beast/pet. The methods to evolution, curing illneses, potential upgrades ect.Now, there exist an occupation called beastmaster tamers whatever so you will know how the face-slaps gonna end.Ok, the mc is just overpowered in his said occupation not in actual strength. Many can kill him though the mc isn't weak either.Okay, now only if you read the later chapters (35 - 40) you would know there is LOTM vibes going on here. (Lord of the mysteries) the mc having his ability (museum) is gonna gather random people into a room where the guests can ask question about their pets to evolve, cure whatever in exchange samples of rare beasts (or other items in the future)Translation - 5* (smooth)SoU - 5* (trial read, always 5 stars)Story Development - 5* (Biased cuz I like the LOTM vibes and sort of copy)Character Design - 3* (There's emotion but not really a solid personality, average?)World Background - 2* (There's no info given, sure where the mc lives and some here and there but it's basically it's name and it's surroundings, no info at all. Maybe in future will it be explained but can't give a high rating. I know it's unfair because only 40 chapters but I am a honest man, have a nice day everyone)Total score: 4.0