Potential: A
Execution: B-
Grammar: D-
Cliche Amount: A+
Overall: B-
Great idea and storyline, but the author ruined by not even TRYING to fix the grammar mistakes. I get not having english as a first language, but for god's sake just put it in free Grammarly or even a Google Doc
Good beginning, lets see how it flows. Though somewhat cliched genre and story line, the characters should make it interesting to read. YO YO YO YO YO YO YO
BORING..................................
Great story!
Great mc past!
Mc not too op.
The pace is not too fast but not too slow i think.
Its remind me the top 3 fiction in qidian about korean-france boy that sick then got system and become superstar but author drop it.
Is this monogamy or harem??
Soooo...because this is a rewrite and I have read the other version of this novel....and because I know this would be better then the original I shall grace you with a 5-star review thank me, later author.
A novel that isn't an uninspired, banal bore? A rare find on this site. This isn't the most unique/original thing in the world but it does set itself apart from all the other stuff at least when it comes to having some potentially neat ideas.
We've only got 20 chapters but I'm actually liking the chemistry our protagonists have with each other which is good because I think this is probably going to the biggest selling points of this novel. It's very early on so we haven't seen all that much interaction between them but I definitely see potential here, I am a sucker for when characters have fun chemistry.
The worldbuilding isn't very original but it doesn't seem to be a complete copy paste of anything else either, the story is alright as far as Chinese novels go.
My biggest gripe with this series is the generic antagonists and just how predictable they are. This is a kinda faceslappy novel and while it isn't unbearably so I can help but be annoyed every time I have to read whatever generic nonsense the mob/side characters spout out.
Despite the significant flaws, I do think that this novel is fairly promising. I think the pros of this novel will substantially outweigh the cons in the long run so I'd be lying if I said I wasn't looking forward to reading more of this. 2.75/5.
Translation is like its generated by machinenovel
And story is just dumb
He is literally playing a game
He is another world but his previous world knowledge is the best......WTF
And that scene when he was in the cave with the girl ..it was like she was waiting for him to sleep with her... like he just touched her once and she pulled her clothes open for him to do her....WTF
this novel is just waste of time!!
it's good but could be better, you should let us get attached to some characters, like the mc.
buy others than that you are doing pretty good.
Novel is interesting!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
I absolutelly love this novel, please don’t drop it and i ll love it for ever, the MC is interesant, skillfull and posses a huge background unlike other vrmmo novels that the MC poor background and only win because dump luck. No cliche so far 10/10
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La historia podría ser mejor pero el personaje principal es un poco tonto y miente sobre las cosas que dice que hará y hace lo contrario, se enamora de una mujer y hace todo por ella y el amor llega demasiado rápido, es como tonto pero seguire leyendo
Perfect wordings, Obviously talented, Characters are real, Inspiring and educative, Honey you have my full support and please continue your hardwork.