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looks like a hunie pop but without the candy crush part .........................................................................................................................
I loved this novel all around good book but it's too bad that the author no longer updates it ant more. It breaks my heart that such a great novel remains in inconclusive.
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hope mc is not too passive and less arrogant....Rawwwwwwwwwwawwswwwwwwwwwwwwwwwweewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwgwhhwhwhhdjdkddkkdkdjdjdjjdjdjekejej
The story so far is good but make sure the plot development is sturdy and not rushed in order to draw more readers. It would be good if MC was in his teenage years then met thor just like now in the avengers 1 fight together same as the current story line you have written
read 41 chapters at a time (the chapters are not large) interesting, even though the hero is dumb for his age............................................
The most basic use of English. If I were to give an estimate, the author’s at best 5th grade English level. This is just a washed down version of every cultivation novel ever. Fight scenes are pathetically written idk why the 9 other ppl even said the book is good. Prob cos it’s the authors alt
This is a weird split with martial art and video games. The reason it is weird is that this is mainly a martial arts book with the mc telling of his video game experience (I exaggerate, but it is how it feels). This is very unusual because usually novels will make it the other way around. Don't be fooled by the description, this is not a video game focused book with a martial arts background, martial arts is the focus.
As for the book out of the game, it is fairly descent. A bit lacking in describing stages of cultivation, but is more or less fine. The is some evil underground threat looming over that is not really expanded on. The thing I find weird is there seem to only be genius cultivators from the young people and no one older has special talents or abilities and are only strong due to time, but the out of game story is not half bad.
As for the video game portion, I will start by saying I usually like video game light novels, but this one seems plain sloppy. Very little detain is given about the game mechanics and the insanely high numbers with no context annoys me. It usually is along the line of: the mc just took 738,000 damage at level 30 and he is fine even though at level 1 he had 1000 hp. There is nothing concrete about the game, except the skills which have a description but have a relatively long cool down (say 20 second) but he uses every attack. I don't know about you, but even I can run 10 meters and attack 3 times in 20 seconds (I would not likely hit but I could do it), but he uses this skill to attack an opponent attacks 3 times, killing the opponent and uses the same skill again immediately after. It really makes the mc feel underwhelming when you think, even a lazy unathletic person like me could do that... What is so special about that.
I love reading this book and hope you could start updating it again it constantly made me laugh and I find what your doing with the plot to be interesting and feel that the concept of this book where a guy is reincarnated to fu©k with mc's because a random god got bored is really uncommon and haveing someone do a fanfiction inside a cultivation world is rare and new and welcome occurance and it's sad that they mostly get dropped by authors when most of them that are able to pull this off seem to be pretty talented writers
The story progresses nicely. There were no perfect book(mine included). I've seen grammar mistakes and sometimes, there were no present punctuations and periods present. But like other authors, no one was perfect. I started like you in the past so keep it up and continue your work.Use Grammarly to edit your work and it's good to go!I hope you also review mine called Lumia: Other World.Happy reviewing!
_ , this a good progressing novel