La historia es interesante, pero deberías poner entre comillas las conversaciones de los personajes.
The story is interesting, but you should put the characters' conversations in quotes.
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it has great character setting and it has a nice world setting
Man, let me tell you something man, let me tell you something man! Snoozy is a phenomenal writer! This is his first book so some people didn’t like the beginning by the way he has grown and progressed with his story telling and world building, they way the Ed our MC has developed its simply mind blowing! There is development of the Ed’s character, mentality and ambition; as well as his powers. The research done into other cultures as well with the combination of western and eastern concepts along with the authors own ideas, they form this expertly crafted story! I don’t want to spoil anything but all I can say is our MC has neutral mindset maybe chaotic neutral mean he will help others but he also will see through his goals and ambitions if it means ignoring someone’s plight, using others or putting himself in harms way. Ed is really OP he’s above average at best where we stand but he’s unmatched in his ability to plot and see plans coming to fruition. The best thing you can do is add this to your library and just read it yourself, don’t take my opinion on anything other than stick through the beginning as this was his first work! He has another book as well that people love I haven’t read it yet but I will, even with it being on hiatus and him wanting to rework it, because he is just that good at drawing you In and i would love to see how he developed with that one as well as when he reworks it how he mad it that much better. I guess I kinda review both but he is great and the story is great! You still reading this? Why?! You should be reading the story at this point! Can’t Wait to see you in the comments of the newer chapter leave me reply to my comments and let me know if I got you started lol
Very interesting and unique new story from Hide.
Knowing his quality of work this one will be really good too. Looking forward to a new fave work by Hideousgrain.
hey author where are you bruh its been a week i didn't see any updates are tou okay
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The language and grammar in the novel is extremely uneven but it does get better. What doesn't get better is the storyline and the MC. MC is a very unlikeable in character and actions. Don't want to go into examples but there are plenty.
Also, the storyline follows your Dragonball power system. MC gets strong, beats the **** out of enemies and all of a sudden someone with Power Level 20,000 comes out when MC is at say 5,000. MC was sequestered for 5 years undergoing crazy training. He was the first user with best class... and there are bunch of people who got much stronger, much faster in that same time frame. Meh.
There are many more annoying things about the novel. It's just not worth the time to read through it.
great novel so far. I hope the author doesn't change his way of writing or place characters recklessly. All in all, a beautiful novel that I will follow.
This actually looks so amazingly unique. Can't wait to see if it just turns into a stupid vrmmorpg, or if it can cement itself as a really good slice of life type book.
It true later on it is a little different,but point is you just took different idea from different novels and made it a little better. I prefer some more original ideas. No matter how you wrap something more beautifully,it is still the same item. Plus this character design is nothing new. Plenty of them out there that are similar like him. For me it is just too edgy and cliche.
Raw link plz