I really love the character development and the plot as well as your writing style but I wish to know more about the world the characters are living in. It would be great if you add more world development in the later chapters and also focus a bit more on Eli's romance with Sara.
Story is well written, and has quite a bit of future potential. Just remember this though, if you yourself, enjoy writing your stories, then that is the one thing that should matter the most more then anything else. Sometimes, it is not about any sort of money or payment, but should in fact, always be about enjoying sharing your work with your viewers and fans. And that, should always take priority, because if your fans and viewers enjoy reading your work, as well as potential future generations, then that is the one thing, that should matter more to you then anything else. For you see, people are more concerned in living in the here and now. While people me, we like to have a more, long game in mind. Now, don't take this as some sort of negative by any means, I am just saying, that if we want future generations to enjoy this world, then we have to be willing to protect what we love, in an effort to do our best to better our future.
if you are into wish fulfillment novels, give it a try, as long as you can stand having grammar errors every 2 or 3 paragraphs, you may enjoy it
Has some flaws here and there and sometimes plays to much into cliches, but It's overall an enjoyable read with a good amount of potential I also like how the MC is currently adapting to his situation (even if it wasn't always the best to get into it). Theirs also a constant push towards some other side characters which is nice. It also starts to stand out more from others that start like it as the story goes on In a way that I really appreciate.
The story is engaging and I want to see where it goes. I hope the author will keep updating it. The system part got me hooked and the author should try to make it interesting
Hey Guys, I'm getting a good response on this novel. I will make this the best slice of life + romance novel of your life. I just need your support and please give reviews so that I can improve it further. I am thinking of a long future for this but this would not be possible without your support.
Such a wholesome read! Audience can really bond with the protagonist with the way they were portrayed, Hina is so wholesome! Interesting story, great plot, nice character description. 10/10 In my reading list.
Not bad.
So far it’s pretty good. Keep updating!!!
I'm confused who is the mate? Is it Hayden it Bruce? But Bruce and Hayden kind get along, they are like a perfect match I swear!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
A wonderful writing keep the good work ?.
more chapters comrade...the story is nice , please dont keep us waiting