Hi, I'm new here so idk but here's my two cents..
The progress of the plotline is too slow. Honestly I come for the BL, but I can't even see who the pairing is, what will be their chemistry, when will they meet (if ML is not one of those characters you introduced already), how they appearance is like...
Well, I thought it would be Bai Chang, since I like bromance lol, but nah.. idk you'll make it that way, and everything is still so vague.
I keep going because I wanna see the BL in the setting you've created.. but so far I only get the setting... at slow paced, and no sight of romance ever happening.. I wonder where is the supposed romance in the BL category.
It lacks the giddiness, the events, and even Bai Cong himself is quite vague, yes he's not emotive and too mature for his age, but the way you narrate it make it even more so.
Nevertheless, I look forward to new chapter to see any developments in the BL area... Wanna see progress so bad.
MAKE MORE CHAPTERS PLEASE
Uhmm. I’m in chapter 10 so far the story is good but the translation is getting worst. It is much better in novelupdates so you can read it there.
Bro… why would someone write this. I hope no one reads this. I know I won’t.
Please... Onegaiii improve ur grammar and how u construct ur sentences. I came here to enjoy and I did but I am also stressed over the fact that I have to decipher the meaning of ur sentences to understand what is going on. I came here to have a good time not deciphering obscure language... Uhhhh it ticks me so much. I sadly have to drop this until I can finally understand a single sentence without tiring my brain out. Peace ✌.
it says completed but the last chap doesnt look like a final chap name, dropped?
Heck yes, I am a hardcore Ml reader. This is honestly a great book in all, great grammar, hooking, and worth reading chapters. But one thing I would say that I am not a fan of is too much info dump
After reading this novel my only problem is that it lacks enough quality in writing. I like how the story is being told and the development so far, it's just that I am not satisfy with how the author construct his sentence and paragraphs. There's always something lacking when I read it. Though, overall, I don't have any problem with them. This just my own opinion, so please don't take any offense Author. I like your work, just please improve your writing
This looked like was going to be a amazing story. Kept me waiting for updates. Would have been probably one of best books on webnovel if author would not have died of corvid when first started spreading.
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overall nice story.
Just need to work on your grammar.
Though It's your first work so I understand.
As I am the author I will give myself 5 stars. This is a story I write in my free time, so don't expect regular uptades, I will try once a week, if you have any criticism or recomendation you are free to help me, I will accept everything as long as it is not offensive to me.