The story is a mess.
Rather than having the mc become a low level master black smith and show his importance it broke world building in order in order to show off Chinese weapons.
Let me explain:
From where I currently left the mc is already 7th grade in terms of power as a martial artist yet still hasn't advanced to low level master blacksmith yet.
And oh by the way he became important to the kingdom. An apprentice blacksmith is a slave because mortal weapons are not really useful but for the sake of power fantasy the author made it so that mortal weapons have great importance. The author also made blacksmiths above apprentice almost nonexistent just so the mc has importance, only grandmasters have appeared. In fact the higher weapons are very very rare for some reason.
When assassin went to the kingdom to assassinate a high target or targets none of them had a single weapon above mortal. Like excuse me? This isn't the end of the dumbness.
For some reason the enemy kingdom just so happen to make a list of all the assassins that are going to kill the targets. Killing these targets would hurt the Xia kingdom. So why would they make a note like that? And why would they entrust that note on some low level martial artists? One of those targets have a very high rank so why? To hide it? Then why would those low ranks have a band of soldiers behind them? Because of that they were discovered.
Why? So the mc could do something important even if he is weak. Why would mortal weapons not break or be inefficient against martial artist? So the mc can be important.
More importantly so Chinese weapons can be praised. That's right all this world breaking is so the author can praise weapons. At least that is what I think otherwise why would the author do this?
I have to be honest I am completely weirded out by the novel. You know Twilight right ? That werewolf guy Jacob that saw Bella pregnant with the vampire Edward's child. Smelled her daughter somehow in her belly and decided to raise her kid before getting romantically involve with her ? That is how I felt reading this.
I have read up to chapter 23 and towards the end I could not continue anymore because of how uncomfortable I felt, exact same feeling. Like right that moment MC is two days old and the girl has fallen in complete love with MC both body and mind. I know it's not technically pedo since they are both kids but MC is still a baby. The elders knows, the grandmother of the girl also see through it and thinks it's ok.
Like look, I know the title of the novel and it was because of it I was thinking to myself I will finally be happy to be able to find a novel without romance however not only did I not get what I wished for but I can already imagine reading the next chapters about a little girl grooming MC to marry him later and this is as bad as what Twilight had made me feel.
Translation quality 5
Story development 2 (Very slow)
Character design 1 (Too 1 dimensional)
World background 5 (Takes from other novel, no creativity but ok not bad I guess)
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Accursed EndlessFantasy Translation, DIE!
typical vrmmo story, the translation for tge first 40 chapters is nit bad but from 41 it's like a standard mtl. don't spend your coins on this
This is such a stupid story already it seems like it wants it to be a VR story but then all of a sudden it is a PC game. It seems to try to act like the MC is actually fighting and doing everything but then it is him using a keyboard and mouse. It even writes it out like all the characters are showing their emotions and able to move however they want. It even says on the first day of the game opening that people were moving around being amazed and stunned by the looks and the way they move like games with good movements is something new for them.
Then we get to the fact that the story is trying to say that almost everyone in the world is stopping to play a PC game. Like just because it was made that everyone is going to go out to buy a gaming computer and stop using any other gaming system. This would make so much more sense if like other stories this was a VR. Other stories that say things like this I can kinda believe if it is the first of its kind and mostly realistic.
This is a copy of another novel with the same name. Didn’t even bother to change the cover. I will now 1 star all of your stolen novels. Imagine stealing IP. You don”t even translate them. You just steal them from other sites.
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This book has the potential and it was worth my time reading it. The grammars are ok, some mistakes here and there but it doesn't matter, at least I could convey what they meant
I like your work Author and hope you don't stop writing until the very end. But i think you shouldn't write one fight with many chapter. Max 3 ideal and if you would increase it is killing the hype. It is just a thought and you shoul write your own story. I hope i can see the end of this beautiful story. Again thanks for the book.
What I found most disturbing about this story are the long, never-ending sentences. I think this story was written by a ten-year-old with a sixteen-year-old libido. I like the theme of the story but can't stand the writing.
I really love the story.
From starting itself its from boys point of view
The FL has lots of hidden talent and she is kinda happy go lucky type.
I really need more chapters now
Author plz update daily.