The grammar does need a little bit of editing. But that's just a technical part of being a writer. The story matters more. For a webnovel, the idea is different and somewhat unique. Video game lovers would definitely have a blast, reading this as they embark on a fantasy adventure with the characters. It's 8 chapters in so I cannot comment on the story development yet. Please do update more :)
I want to start this review by saying I quite like it from what I've read so far.
It is quite original and the world background is very interesting.
Some negative points however are the writing quality, and the narration.
While I do think that the writing quality isn't particularly bad I find that there's a lot of grammar mistakes and the expressions used could be improved quite a lot. As for the narration sometimes its simply dry and doesn't convey any meaning, or can get confusing with too much information at once when the sentences aren't structured well.
Thanks author I really liked reading your ideas.
Okay, so I don't look bias. Haven't begun my reading but I like the synopsis. So I'm gonna give a review first then after reading Or during reading, give another one.
Keep it up
The story is interesting and mysterious. It's just that sometimes i don't understand what is happening but it'll explain in the end. Currently reading it so I can't say more. Hope it'll surprise me more. Expecting much from this book . ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
Was honestly very skeptical of the novel at first because I assumed it was a 'Everybody Else is a Returnee' clone. Was happy to find out that only the beginning of the novel is somewhat similar and the rest of the novel (so far) is quite different. Honestly this novel is very strange to me some times, the game elements almost seem randomly thrown in and out of place in this evolution style novel giving it a "broken world" feel (which makes sense as you read the novel). Most surprising thing about novel though is that it does actually deal with some emotional topics such as immortality, loneliness, death, companionship, etc. Very surprising for this kind of novel as you would expect most of it to be fighting and whatnot while actually a lot of it is about exploration and going though the motions of life. Anyways I recommend checking this novel out I quite like it.
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Great story , I love the way you wrote the story and the plot is very interesting can't wait for more updates here's a 5 star for this Great story?
Really nice story till now nice settings and the side characters have a sense of presence.unlike most cultivation novels where the side characters only job is to make noise and serve as a foil to the greatness of the mc. Here every one is their own personWorld background and setting though generic is pretty decent.MC's personality is also a happy-go-lucky-and-I-don't-give-a-damn-about-the-world and likable overallreally liked the story and the first antagonist presented is also decent-ishh(ok he is just a crappy old man)Anyways it's a good novel so check it out.
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Very interesting story that took me to worlds, places and situations I could never have imagined. Dave has to deal with Goddesses (Destiny and Transmigration), with "Random World Transmigration Act" (which I won't begin to explain), a fairy, and most importantly, Lavendar. One of my favorite lines is, "This place defies the law of... well I think it defies all of them." That is what this tale does, it defies the usual and predictable, which is one of its best features.
I would have given a five but author has not been updating regularly. Please I need more updates ??????????????????????????
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