I won't say this is the best or most original novel here but i will say its one of the best (If not THE best) executed novels on the website with very few weak points, all the scenarios the author sets up are engaging, all the fights are rock solid and thrilling, all the powers are comprehensive, diverse and well thought out. There's 0% fat in this novel, nothing ever feels like "Filler" or unnecesary (Besides maybe the skill descriptions that you can just skip if you already know about it)
As for weak points (Author, if you see this, i hope you take these in consideration), there's only 2 of them and they're easily fixed, the characters have little going on besides wanting to be stronger, which is understandable since they're thight on time, but having them do something else besides training and bicker in the background would be nice, playing cards, watch TV (There should be some kind of entretaintment besides VR capsules) or even go to a strip club would add some life to their characters, given them a hobby or something that has nothing to do with getting strong, have them interact with other people and see how they solve their problems without the MC, have a bit more chapters about them and what they think of their situation and what they want to do with their lives, but its not urgent either (And its not like he didn't do any of these, i just think its lacking).
The other weak point is that the world, although well thought out so far, also has little going on besides getting stronger/richer, not that there's any problem with that since since these are all broad strokes about the setting and its factions we are just getting to know, so far the framework is solid but it lacks color.
All in all i always felt execution always trium** over originality and this is the closest to a 5/5 in execution i saw so far, great stuff, i hope he doesn't drop it.
The F*** kind of novel is this??
Complete Trash
Story repeats for 2 chapters , just different set of words or some changes in perspective
16 chapters for another game , just wow
3 chapters for last 60 seconds of blue circle?? *DBZ smiles in the corner*
Suddenly so much popularity?? Hmmm... K ,you win
Expressions in pubg?? Are we talking about the same game?
Bear Squad of 20+ in same solo game?? Bro your logic is .....
And some things out of order in almost every chapter...
Maybe someone will read it out of boredom( like me)
But don't expect us to really like this "out of order, full of loopholes" novel
A good read , wish content was released a little more often because i dont feel i truly can get sucked in with so little chapters. then again i read 50 chapters a day for fun lol
This book is simply too good to not read, especially because the author might just make you an offer you can't refuse. Read before it's too late!
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Love the story, nice world building and great character development. Have a little issue with the grammar but not too much, it didn't really affect my reading experience. I'm looking forward how the story would progress, there is a lot of tease here and there but it didn't reveal much. This story is big I'm guessing it would reach +1000 plus chapter I just hope the writer continue. Nice work
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The internal struggle in Ryo's mind is the highlight of this story. From what he went through during his adolescence up to when he was already an ex yakuza was so realistically laid out that I could practically perceive the pain he's going through. It gives us a feeling it can happen to any of us. That guilty struggle to right the wrong of the past but still ending up choosing an inescapable path of deceit really hits the spot. We've got a real marvel of a storyteller here. Great job, author! This one can potentially become a big scifi hit someday, so good luck
Personally, I think confidence and morale are critically important. I placed this review here just to reflect that.
As of now, the story isn't really face-paced. Ideally, I think it would be better to increase the pace but I also don't want to compromise too much on the details or risk creating plot-holes.
I do re-read and check things to minimize the plot-holes as much as realistically possible.
I also take constructive criticism very seriously. I will try to incorporate every comment that seems feasible and beneficial for the story's growth.
Overall, this is a long-term project with a lot of potential.
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It's a good read if you're looking for something quick to read but turning off your brain is a must before delving into this.
But I'm sure despite the black holes that are coming left and right, you can still have a chance on patching them up
Tbh, I get bored really easily while reading. Surprisingly, this didn't bore me even once. Didn't expect a first timer to write so well. You go man!!!!!