Pacing is way too fast and character interactions seem forced, not enough details and background information. Fights need some work as well.
I've been hooked since the first chapter and binge-reading this 'til the latest chapters and I want more! Darius is a tsundere that is only soft on Xion and no one else, and the sexual tension... I love this! Please update more chapters, Author!
I really like How author Laid out foundation of world at beginning ?. I was intrigued by that . as story progress MC's character depth increases which I liked a lot. but my best moments came after 25 chapter that left me wondering " what the hell just happened???" I like the management of Fights , Drama and humor all along.... give it a try I'm pretty sure you'll love it. ? ?....
honestly really impressed. I read your other novel- the fairy and the wolf one, and ended up dropping it after 370 chaps. Despite having read the other novel however I honestly can't believe this was made by the same person. It's only 14 chaps yet it has a near perfect start. It introduces us to the interesting main characters, teases us with their complex personalities, and then drops us into some good old-fashioned combat, that gives us some glimpses at what we can expect from the future brawls. I AM HOOKEDonly thing I'm worried about is the harem aspect, I like harem... BUT not when everyone is in the harem. like it's fine for MC to like see, but when ever female character is there to either have, fantasize, or become a slave to sex, then it devalues the whole story.there's already the mom, sister, wolf, guard, and its only 14 chapters. sure those are just the ones he "loves" but let's be serious for a moment, it's not lookin so good. I hope this book does better on this front then the wolf one
It was WN suggestion and I love it, just bunch read to the end of all my coins and no regress ?
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good novel .,..... recommended ... recommended
A very boring fanfic. Having the MC reincarnated into the Hidden mist village, that too during the 3rd Great Ninja War was such a good idea for a fanfic. The air of uncertainty and restlessness is missing. The academy is still all sunshine and daisies even when they're literally losing the war. It's basically Konoha with a lot of mist.
they are not the novel to be read in the
This novel is gripping and makes you want to keep going and get more into the story and action! Like watching a movie! ??????
It was bad and good at same time… thie idea is good… the bad thing is… it only have 8 chapters
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