I really enjoyed the beginning chapters. i normally don’t enjoy systems but it definitely sounds good so far. I hope you focus more on the world building. And you did good at conveying emotions
The story is very interesting. Early on everything is black-and-white clear-cut but as the story progresses things get Blurred and it’s cool too see how the MC Interacts with the Characters
Amazing story. The most unique thing about this story is that it is written by a Pakistani and written in Pakistani style. Good luck author in writing more novels in future
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This has only begun recently, but it has already grabbed my attention, by making me speculate on some of the people, that the lead character has met so far; whereby and how that their actions will have an impact on the coming Apocalyptic events.
I am so looking forward to reading more.
Aye! for those full pledge lover of twisted plot, this one is a must try.
Just happen to saw this story by chance and it hooked me. I think its destiny, LOL! HAHAHAHAH
Hoping to see more of your chapters dear author....
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This is a pretty nice novel. The story is decently captivating and it really shows thought on parts of it. However, the one part that was underwhelming would be the fact that this was less system and more divine knowledge. The system can be entirely taken out and be replaced by something along the lines of sealed memories of a past life. All in all, this is definitely not a system novel regardless of how enticing the novel may be.
been reading this novel 3× and it's really, really good, except some minor grammars all in all it's A.M.A.Z.I.N.G.
specially the a father in marvel, I hope you continue that story, I'm a fan of marvel that's why and your plots and theme are amazing making me wanting more.
I don't know what this is. The clear descriptions are all over the place and nothing seems to be stable. Maybe it will become a good story but my head has hurt enough because I just want to be lazy and read an easy to follow story
Enjoying the story so far.
The book contains strong resemblance to other VRMMO novels, that's to be expected. The author even mentioned that it was inspired by the likes. Just thought to mention that first and foremost.
What separates this from other novels of this genre is the MC, who is a returner from a Isekai world. I like his thought process. He thinks through things and knows what he's doing. His expierence in the Isekai world heightened his senses, and while you might say that makes him OP, and the story boring, the author depicts it as a liability. I want to see him overcome that.
As mentioned before, the story is very much inspired by other novels of the genre. Thus, the world-building inside is very similar/the same to those of other stories. As a avid Eastern fantasy/lit rpg reader, I would've like to see some differences.
Finally, I want to conclude this review with words about the writing. Info dumps are relatively low, and grammar is above average. I notice though the structure and fluidity between paragraphs can be improved on. There can be some rewording and better word choices to make the writing sound not so bland and flat.
All in all, this is a great read for fans of LitRPG and VRMMO. Characters are great and story develops very well. I hope author keeps up the good work.
Happy reading!
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TL;DR: This novel is like having a steak dinner after only eating hamburger helper for months.
First off, the writing itself is on point. Just talking about grammar, punctuation, and spelling, it reads like someone actually proofread the chapters, and there aren't noticeable errors that distract from reading! Many available webnovels seem to suffer from a lack of proofreading, but this one doesn't. Even if this author doesn't actually proofread.
In addition, the author's voice and varied vocabulary ensure good sentence variety and proper flow in each chapter all the way to the end, upon which one realizes they've read a lot, but still want to keep going. Once again, good flow is often hard to find in webnovels, so this one is a breath of fresh air. Or rather, a bite of sirloin steak.
Plus, the characters have tangible character development--the big brain imp from the first 100 chapters is very different than the one now. Not just in power and figure, but also in what he values and how he reacts to events now.
Ok I'm tired of writing now--it's a good book, story good, characters good, author good, I def dont regret spending 3 days reading all the way through. Though my wallet hurts a bit, I'd do it again.