Putting my heart back together.
"This Senior really comes and goes in a rush." The nearby Supreme Grand Elder of the Wanderingcloud Sword Sect, Bei Heng, sighed, and his voice carried boundless regret.
One of the characteristics of the Divine Void Cultivation Technique is that it doesn't have any walls at any level. No matter how much Qi is put in unless the user gets tired themselves the technique will never stop working due to too much Qi. No matter how many pills Lin Dong would take his cultivation would still rise.
*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters*Constructive Criticism: I saw "Don't read this story. It's not worth your time." as the synopsis, I would only use something along similar lines if you dropped the novel, and then you should include the word dropped somewhere in the synopsis. Also, if you did drop the novel, I'd suggest publishing a new chapter saying such then deleting all the other chapters due to how short the story is as is. Two months is too long for a web novel unless on hiatus, and then such should be made clear.;,;. The plot felt slow, I am not really sure what to say about that though.;,;.Positive Feedback: Your world building is progressing at a good rate in comparison to your plot, and I really like the character development.Personal Feedback: I thought the story was too slow. I can see that there is a decent plot coming together, but I still can't begin to see the next milestone due to the lack of speed, thus I will not be continuing this story.
I will say what I want to say in here and post teasers in the designated Author's note because it can only fit 500 characters including space. That amount cannot fit all the blabbering that I will make so here its. By now you should already notice what fanfic this is, A special thanks to the 11 people who place this at there library. Chapter 2 is on progress.
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"Hei anak muda ... kau sungguh tak mau mengambil uluran tangan ku ini ?"
"Wait, before you say anything, I have two questions," she said before smiling warmly. She then walked to the desk and sat on the leather chair. "First, has the Hitherstone kidnapping shenanigan been solved?"
name :Carl d francy. lvl:9 0/100
Jazz: It still has some, we are gonna be fine.
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'It was not necessary…'