As a person whose read the Raws up to 300. I can no longer recommend this. Would you believe if I told you MC still believes himself to be a commoner after what he’s done? Would you believe that 300 chapters past... and yet nothing accomplished! All of this is just Drama. It’s killed a lot of my brain cells. So I suggest you stop reading this till there’s more chapters, you’ll see that I’m right since nothing going to happen if you read every update. Sigh. The system becomes completely insignificant in the story, what happen to gaining immortality? This is not a story. Author is just another wordslave.
MC is too insecure about his own looks to have any male pets and of course has to have multiple pretty female pets. It really makes me think there is going to be some harem stuff with his pets later on and that makes me uncomfortable.
The story seems okayish, a bit slow and a bit random.
The characters seem a bit unpolished and maybe stretched to fit a mold.
All in all, it's fine for some mindless reading but I have no hope for this becoming something that can really grip my interest. I have only read 19 chapters so keep that in mind.
Currently at chapter 632. Story has no substance. There's no real goal, it feels like the author doesn't know which way he's heading. Too many Arcs with no real plot. Basically, there's no momentum at all. No excitement. The villains get killed with no real satisfaction because...again, no momentum. Even the romance has no substance. The harem has no glue. All the side characters doesn't leave you with any impression at all. If i have to describe this in one word: Bland.
REALLY REALLY fun read. I read all of the available chapters in one night and could not take my eyes away. Great progression speed. great characters, great world building. I would recommend everyone give the book a try. WELL worth your time.
It's a shame it wasn't chosen, I love novels in which the MC is immortal! Does anyone know anything else to recommend that the MC is immortal?
I'll try to continue reading this in MTL, but from what I've seen the writing seems almost unintelligible.
Website : qidian china
Views : 5.27million
Rating : 8.9(65)
Chapters : 722
Status : completed
Word count : 2.21million
author level : lv3
No of works : 9
Disscussion : 103
Year started : 2009 (pretty old imo)
Chinese title : 游戏小工之元素操控师
I am certain that nobody reads these trial reads before it gets to us because this is just unreadable and I'm once again stunned by how professional Webnovel is. This is like a really bad MTL at best. Rubbish. 0/5.
thanks dear author I really love your books they are a world outside ours am waiting for what LSR will do after getting over his shock
Actually a good novel if the author pays a little more time in story telling , editing and proof reading.
I am actually hooked to it right now iwont reveal spoilers but if you are gonna binge read it, try it when your in a good mood or when you are not sleeping.
This review is only grading for Writing Quality, Story Development, and Character Design, for reasons I will elucidate on later.
WRITING QUALITY
The author has taken a serious gamble in writing in third-person present tense and I feel it hasn't paid off. This is a personal thing, but I mention it first because it can seriously impact how easily read the work is; third-person past tense is the standard for fiction for reasons. This isn't the reason for my score here, though.
I was surprised and shocked in the course of going over this work to discover that it apparently has an editor. If I may make a suggestion, perhaps you should have spent less time arguing over using a pronoun and more time actually proofreading the thing, Mighty Editor.
The author's grasp of appropriate punctuation and capitalization is very loose. The confusing convention of bracketing thoughts with periods (yes, I understand Inkstone doesn't allow formatting; there are still other ways to do it) only worsens the presentation when half of the things that should have periods at the end don't.
Apostrophes keep getting thrown in where they don't belong. The author has his own creative ways of spelling certain words (phlegm is now flem apparently, for example). All-in-all it's a crapshow that desecrates the mother tongue.
I rate this even lower than usual because this is apparently with an editor's assistance. Bad.
STORY DEVELOPMENT / CHARACTER DESIGN
I am exempting World Background from this review as it is a work using the real world (the stars given are the average of the work).
The synopsis is useless. One might think the author of the work is solely relying on the popularity of novels with systems that get updated often enough to carry the work, but that would be cynical of me to suggest so I won't.
The author seems to mistake "slang use" for "character". Applied to side characters to denote class/status or used with auxiliaries or a main with more personality than a potato, it's a useful tool. This is not the situation here; the slang is the character here.
The main character is a stupid, ugly, dirty, whiny slob. That's his trait list, more or less. There isn't a whit of charm or even something intriguing to care about. The others characters are this but in stiffer cardboard.
SUMMARY AND AN EXTRA WORD OR TWO
The work is a painful slog through a minefield of bad formatting and creative attempts at reforging the English language anew. The characters could all die in nuclear fire and the world would be better for it. This isn't the same as writing a "love to hate" villain, for the record; they're just that abominable.
Why did I not include Stability of Updates? Because I've decided to not rate that anymore when the prose is abominable like it is here. I no longer wish to encourage authors to churn out factory crap at the expense of using a straightforward spelling and grammar checker (again, amazed that this work supposedly has an editor).
The other thing I have to note: I'm not sure if this work is a genuine effort anyway. Lazy synopsis, lazy cover, short chapters with zero TLC, and the author seems to launch himself from inflammatory position to inflammatory position in a ball of flame to put the Hindenburg to shame.
I'll make no judgment of the various attempts at self-immolation. Instead I'll just note my personal opinion that it's monumentally stupid to insult a major demographic base for the site, which largely draws from an audience in SE Asia.
Whether troll work or genuine, I would not recommend this to anybody for anything except a master class on what not to do. If this is indeed a parody of the "low effort system novel" trend, I do not want to encourage any more of it. If it is genuinely written, I still do not want to encourage any more of it. I just want the pain to stop.
please update more chapters wanna read more chapters
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