I thought this would be interesting, but this is another mindless face slapping novel. They sacrifice the story for these moments and the whole novel hurts becomes of it. many other novels do this and it really bothers me. dont do it if it will make your novel worse. Also chapters 1-10 the translation is pretty good, 11-20 it gets a bit wonky, then from 21-30 you can see the problems. I stopped st 31 because the story became mindless, the whole system was forgotten for some dumb drama, and the translation become worse throughout the story. hope this becomes better in the future.
Highly recommended. The MC is the most righteous character ever written. The tag “Evil Protagonist” is either purely a slander, or the MC was misunderstood by the mass.
The translator is a little lazy and the editor (if there is one) isn't pointing out the inconsistencies. A porcupine as a boar and even is called a boar at one point but is often called a porcupine... Lots of little things like that.
The author doesn't seem to know what their doing at the start and just kind of dumps stuff on us without any clear goal. Gets better though as the author seems to figure out what their trying to do. By chapter 20 the story is mostly readable and is fairly enjoyable. I question the direction of the story and suspect many undesirable choices will be made in the stories development... but unless I see that I'm hopeful that it'll turn out to be a decent story though with WebNovel's track record that hope is questionable.
I totally love this! Cultivation novel? Yes! BL? YES!!
The writing style is so good, every scene, specially the atmosphere and setting were expressed vividly with excellent use of figures of speech (I totally appreciate stories where authors lay special attention to the use of these) the use of FOS makes me imagine the scenes and feel them vividly which makes me want to read more. The characters are adorable and I really love them! Also I love the plot! It doesn't revolve only to the attraction of both characters given its BL rather it makes the story revolve around them to slowly develop each of them and later the romance (｡･ω･｡) Also, author is so kind and sweet! (ﾉ*>∀<)ﾉ♡♡♡
This book is awesome and cant wait to see whats next but it wont let me comment at the bottom of the page.... Im on chapter 220 and I even tried a couple other and wasnt able to too... I think the server is messed up!
Only 22 chaps in but stuff feels rushed and there are random jumps in between words. The grammar isn’t the best but it’ getting better as the story progressess. It’s a good book but there is a lot of stuff that needs improvement. Other than that no more complaints
I had to read it a lot of times to try and understand the world, so I'd say try to improve on it. But the quality of the writing is very good, which at least gives a better understanding of the book.
Since you asked for it, here you go. Webnovel's rating feature is quite literally the most useless function on the planet, though. I normally leave my 1-star reviews on the websites people use to circumvent your paywall. 'Cause I don't pay for trash, and anyone that does is handicapped.
After finishing the book, I have to say that there were excellent points to the story and some not-as-great ones. Now my favorite moments in the story were that for most of the plots, the MCs had clear plot armor, like gaining new powers right when they needed it the most. Normally people frown upon plot armor, because it takes away tension if you know the MC won't actually lose. I love how the author constructed the plot armor to have an in-universe source, i.e. Ms. Kang and the Demon Lord, but it does have one problem. After the Demon Lord stops being able to manipulate the MCs' storylines, I feel that the MCs should have had a moment where they realize the extent of their previous plot armor, and perhaps had character growth as they realize they don't need it anymore. One point that I disliked was that Sakura's initial plot was supposed to be a thriller, but I think that the LGBT+ antagonism took away from the thriller plot. Now as someone who is actually bi, I don't have a problem with LGBT+. I just think that from a narrative standpoint, the reason Jason was a big antagonist was that he was transphobic, and I think Jason could have been developed more as a villain by having him kill off an acquaintance, rather than him just spouting transphobia every time he has a dialogue with Sakura. The biggest problem I had, though, was that the MCs were able to actually defeat the Demon Lord. Now I realize that they could because he let his guard down, but as soon as he was poisoned he could have just teleported away, and neutralized the poison, before returning to fight. Plus, as someone who was literally able to vaporize the entire Korean subcontinent, a fact the author seemed to gloss over, I don't think it would make in-universe sense for the MCs to think they could beat him. In-universe, that would be like someone shooting a shotgun at a nuke and expecting it to fall over, completely disarmed. I just think that perhaps the MCs themselves didn't have to defeat the Demon Lord. They could have forced a reincarnation spell on him, so he wasn't really defeated, but evicted. Or on the other hand, the Demon Lord could have either won, or let himself be killed and be like "this world bores me, but I didn't have the heart to commit suicide. so long, off to the next world" and that would have been a perfectly fine ending. Not that the original ending wasn't entertaining, it just didn't make sense worldbuilding wise. TLDR; just read it, it's a good book if you can suspend your disbelief for the ending.
Keep it Up Its really good ngl hehehehehe
Although it's my first time reading a book in this genre, I must say you portrayed all descriptions accurately. The world background, the game description and inside the game everything seems real. Nice work author. Keep up the good work.
Ok, so, this is my first "review", like ever, so don't expect anything from me or something.
So far the novel has me hooked.
Keep up the great work author!