This is a good novel so far, above average for the genre in my opinion except for one problem that I have. I think the conflict developing with the military is a bit dumb. My first issue is, why would the military behave this way? I understand the mc, in my mind he’s basically a feral animal right now, he feels cornered by the world and like he can’t trust anyone but Charlotte, it’s really good and I’m enjoying it a lot. But this military thing could have played out a lot better, firstly we already know the doctor is working with the military as an informant right? So instead of kidnapping his sister like a bunch of idiots and 100% guaranteeing an antagonistic relationship with a future power house, all they had to do was tell the doctor to tell Arthur “I’m sorry but our treatments are not working, with the current technology and medicine that we have your sisters prognosis is approximately 4 weeks. However if you are interested, I have a friend in the military and they have some advanced treatments that could give her more time or be more effective in treating her, if you want I could talk to them for you. I have to tell you though, I’m only saying this because I can see you are a beta tester, this isn’t an opportunity you can buy with money or influence, I don’t know how strong you are but the military is looking for exceptionally strong beta testers. You would have to prove to them that you are worth the effort and investment but if you are strong and show your value, I am positive that they will at the very least be able to give you’re sister more time.” Any military tactician would have approached it more like this, the doctor is already an insider, instead of doing stupid stuff this would have made Arthur hungry for their help, he would be scared and not trusting but with no other choice he would go them and to make sure he doesn’t lose out on the chance to save his sister he would show them more of his power. Now there’s lots of ways to tweak this to make them fall out later and become enemies, have misunderstandings or whatever if you still want conflict to happen. But to me this is would have been a much smarter approach from the military and makes a lot more sense. Still loving the story so far though!
Common Author! Let's continue the story, please
absolutely mind-blowing and captivating novel, Author?
The tension right from the first chapter was thrilling! I am a huge fan of action stories and this is a great one! Loving it so far
The story seems good but the traduction to Spanish is poor
It’s quite good, not much I can critique. Appreciate the story and beginning it’s quite unique. Also the writing quality doesn’t give me epilepsy reading it. It’s flows well and it’s immersive. Nice man.
i am shameless can't lie, love my story but there is an issue i struggle with, pacing. but hey, we all start some where right, i will keep improving my skills as time goes on.
This is simply mind blowing. Never had I thought that I would encounter a well executed story like this in this platform. I didn't have any great hopes at first and just thought I will eventually get bored with it. But strangely enough, the story which I thought was boring made me spend the night reading, refusing to skip any words. I believe I could never reach this kind of skill in weaving a story, I greatly respect you Author Parmesan, this novel is marvelous.
I already read the book and And I just really like it ❤️. I was wondering what happened next. Just love it ❤️
Dropped from ch 8. Cus author makes mc a beta. Spoiler: Mc regressed to the past after being killed by his girlfriend and cousin. Mc is supposed to be smart and etc but author has to make him dumb… chapter 7 and he already starts trusting a girl by letting her in his bunker that he built. Even tho author keeps on repeating from ch 1-6 that mc will NOT trust anyone.
enticing and mystical , romance filled and action loaded.
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