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great book . more pls , upload more quickly
A decent story that's well written and actually worth reading. I hope this will get picked up and translated properly. Till then I'll have to make do with MTL which is less than ideal.
10 chapters in and I'm honestly so surprised that I haven't fallen asleep, it's that boring. Anyone with sleeping problem, can read this novel non stop, guaranteed to fall asleep
As a rookie author myself i hope your novel does well and you enjoy writing. All the best on the trails ahead.
As a reader, I found the premise of your story to be very intriguing, especially with the heavenly tribulation origins. The world has potential for intrigue and grabbing someone's attention. I appreciate the creativity.
As for the con, the conversations between the characters are not organic, making it feel unreal and stiff. Also, the transition between the different scenes seemed a little rushed.
In my eyes, your novel has potential as long as you work on the interactions and the pacing. Those are my humble two cents as a reader. All the best!!!
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Yet another post-apocalyptic novel with a system (which apparently is a djinn in a lamp) - I am very positive about the novel, the MC is developing nicely, I like the Russian angle, the plot contains interesting twists for future development & the harem is kept at a minimum (regarding plot) - one important drawback though is the low release rate, I'd rather stop reading now and binge later.
Honestly, I love the ingenuity and newness of your storyline. It’s like a fresh, fantasical take on very familiar issues and it makes it easier to relate with the characters. I like the pacing and your overall tone and delivery, but I think you need to work a bit on your grammar construction and punctuation. Asides from that, this is a truly promising story and I think you’re doing an amazing job!
Thanks for the interesting story
I liked the rhythm of experiencing, everything in writing.
The reader revives in his own imagination and idealizes having that adventure. And do that role play, between intrigue, romance and virtual conquest with a pass to face-to-face dates...
I got hooked on the story and I saw myself, like a fan above: watching the show while going around a thousand times...
I will miss the long paragraphs of this novel.
It's really a great story. I would love to know further!!! the story is quite interesting while reading. Good works Author.
My best regards to you
honestly the story is good and the writer is quiet talented too , but there were a some plot holes such as when the mc left to adventure he was undercover and only the guild master recognised him , and then left to slay the dragon , meanwhile Lancelot found his aura at the crime scene ( idk man black tech , helps you know the owner of the aura , how it works ? not explained ) and somehow and with no further lead he kind of went where the mc is ,how he knew his location ? not explained , saw him fighting the dragon , used a spell (he's a swordman who can use mana and divinity ,which is unbalanced) that teleports the enemy against his will from miles away , how it works ? not explained then he made a barrier that made him invincible , how it works ? not explained
if you read the above you'll get my first point : only a little is explained.
my second point is how inconsistent the story is , for example lancelot crossed the distance between 2 nations in a day and a half max , while in the 'castle attack' arc the duchess didn't call the Duke to come because it'll take a week ? ,i mean the distance was 20 kilometers and he was far more powerful than Lancelot so shouldn't he cross it in an 2 hours max ?