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Best novel of the week.
Well in fact it's the only good novel this week.
It's quite inovative and interresting so try it!
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The only thing I dislike about this novel is that the MC is super stupid. He does such basic mistake even in the late part of the story. If not for the plot Armor he would have died 100 times.
Knew nothing about the Book but when I saw
In The Kingdom Of Qin
Boom I knew I met that cool interesting book.
Was cool and nice to read
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I love the creative nature of the novel. I look forward to reading more. I hope its a long novel and a very captivating one. Looking forward to your next release
Action - Op two swords wielding SAO style but a hundred times better with time magic/law
Romance - although it is a little too easy to get into the harem in my opinion the romance is after
Comedy - Modern comedy we all love and enjoy
R-18 - some of the best I've seen!
Mature - meh
Sword and magic - a desent rpg classic type
Cultivation - although it is confusing at times to be honest they all are!
Harem -
currently :
Moon goodess /empress (not now but its currently the path shown)
Wolf girl (npc but as the plot moves you realise...
i really force myself into reading this novel... so so..
- the story is about plagia....mmmm i mean bringing the toys from earth to the parallel word, i like the idea but the mc is really childish... and the way he advertise his toys is really annoying.... blazing teens balala fairies... etc etc
- and i dont understand the author's joke, so dry...
The Main Character is a coward. That would have been fine, but he whines so much about his ‘bad’ luck and l doesn’t even use his brain to turn desperate situations around. He needs some deus ex machina bullshit just to survive because he’s so pathetic.
MC is also a spineless pushover.
A loli will also come to be his companion for a very arbitrary version, and if you like violent and unreasonable ‘tsunderes’, then you’ll like her.
His power is fine. He just whines about it’s source and doesn’t think about what he can do with it.
Think about it for a sec. If you are going to die and your only way to live is to do cutesy, girlish poses, would you do it?
If no, then the MC with his overly high masculine pride may be relatable to you.
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Great book but u need to work more on character discription such as facial colaur of eyes personality behaviour and can u use different coloured or different brackets for each character so asto make it easy to understand.Also I think you can add more mysterious theme, missions, a setof group of friends ,hidden treasures
Friends to mcand such
From -A fan of your work
You can look forward to these series to get an idea for further development
In another world with a smart phone.
To say it in a single sentence:
It is at least 20 times slower than your average webnovel.
I am right now close to 1000 chapters of reading and you would be surprised if I say that the whole 1000 chapters would have been 50 chapters in another webnovel.
At least according to the pacing.
But this snail-like slow-paced novel has its charm. it allows you to get a good feel for how vast the world described in this novel actually is. You meet different people, enemies, friends, students, companions, and strangers.
The only thing that you might get annoyed with, is the code of the main character. He gets taken advantage of by a lot of people and as of now does not have any personal goal. His main goal of saving his dear teacher stands still, but it gets dragged a lot by the author.
But I am sure if the novel keeps the build-up pace and develops at the same steady pace, it will be a good and epic story.
As of now, in-world time only has passed at about a single year at roughly 940 chapters. So I hope that the protagonist is on his way to gain the first major milestone in the world and continues to develop in such a manner. I expect at least another 1000 chapters before the author moves on to the next grand milestone.
It is a different type of a story as most stories tend to rush from one milestone to the end, treating the immediate goal as the means to an end, while I hope that the journey will treat Angor just as kindly and badass at every milestone.
Hey author!!
Really glad to read your story and shocked that a young author come up with such a brillant idea of writing and expressing thoughts to words...i just read your chapter and each one gave me eager to read another one...every character you just plotted in this story just polished your thinking and writing skills to another level..
Really glad that young authors like you growing very well ..
Just liked your character samuel the way you just plotted him as a naughty one you made such a entertaining character.. even with the harry just give the vibe of seriousness...
But overall all the very best for your upcoming chapters...
You are really such a good entertainer