Jack, an introvert who was bullied and taken advantage of because of his name which means doggie.His father was not good at handling money and made bad decisions regarding this and incurred a huge debt in which he now has to pay since his parents died.Now he has to survive with a worsening predicamentWill it bring Jack to insanity or salvation?I am loving the story thus far and everything's all good except for some grammatical errors but it could be cleared with an editor.This novel can reach great heightsAuthor please upload more and regularlyI am willing to spend my SP here daily if you fulfill these wishes;3
THIS IS A CONSTRUCTIVE FEEDBACK REVIEW AND DOES NOT PROBABLY RELATE TO THE CURRENT NOVEL'S TRUE RATINGThe novel was surprisingly good. If I were to say anything, you just need to reread your chapters more and put in commas at certain places. Only typo I noticed was you put ,., somewhere at the start I think. Noticed you aren't putting in commas before ands and buts a lot.Also for the story, its not realistic how he found the cube at that place. Countless people visit there every year, how was he the first to find and pick it up after (assuming its from ancient Greece) centuries have passed?Also I would change up your start. Its not interesting for readers to read flasbacks at the start of a book. This is why whe there are flash backs, its always way farther into the book or movie if its poplar.You should also consider a Prologue. This is how you grab people's attention, and interest. This is how they survive the first few chapters. I myself was not interested at the start, but I kept reading.Now I noticed two big plotholes of your story. One is he put countless death marks, but when you jumped into levels, he barely died that much, also he only marked at the start. Then its as if his flashback persnality disapeared and his whole personality changed. As I've read a lot of books and I am also an author, I can guess that the flashback isbfor way farther into the book, but guarantee 99% didnt think that much and just ignored it or thought the book was stupid and left.Second one are the stats, you made stat points really low, but whe MC gained stats rivaling the police officers, he was more macho and studd compared to them? Even more than that scrawny asian guy you said? Also try to describe emotions and five senses more, was bit bland reading. Try to describe things more, and add more relatable thing so its not 2D.Lastly I marked 3 for updates as long hiatus. I would've done two, but looking at your past record and past two days, nearly updated every day so bumped it up to 3. It would've hit four or above if not for that.
Story is short. Suitable for reader who doesn't like long stories. However, the background is a bit loss. Only vague brief explanation. Futhermore the ending was too hasty...leaving many questions open.In overall, it is a nice to read story if one does not expect much.
Big ups to the author and other readers. I await more chapters. Story is so interesting. Writing quality - mechanical accuracy, spelling of words, punctuation, translation, and vocabulary must be improved. High stability of story update, keep it up! World background or setting should even be real and not limited to only anime worlds.
What else can say other then more more more mote more more more more more Keep up the good work The writing quality is really good Nd very attractive
Interesting concept, and as much as I love fallout novels this just isn’t one for me. the author needs to find an editor if they ever come back to this novel, it’s not the worst English I’ve seen but still i bit broken.
all the most amazing novel.It was my first time reading a novel and the experience is amazing and best!I totally love the FL and the ML too
Ooh, a Singapore webnovel. Never seen those before. Xp
Muito bom a novel recomendo à todos a acompanhar não vão se arrepender. ....................................................................................?
I love this novel it's the best book I've read in a while story development world development everything is just perfect he's also knows what he's doing that's why I love this novel
I like the story . So far its super good and i really recommend this story to those who seek a wonderfull story✌??✌? SUBARASHI!SUBARASHI!SUBARASHI!SUBARASHI!SUBARASHI!SUBARASHI!SUBARASHI!
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