Watch out popular manga creators are going to steal this peak because they could never make something as good in a million years............
Not bad. A few English mistakes, but compared to some other works, this is excellent. The writing sttle itself is not my cup of tea, but it's well done.Reasonable development, with good characters and world building.I won’t keep reading because it’s not my cup of tea, but from a technical standpoint it’s hard to find things to criticize here.Keep up the good job, author!!
The circle has expanded from just Whitmore playing house to their impact to others , the fear in Alistair as mentioned Whitmore power is great , I surely want to see one scene where they will get the chance of displaying their power.
The plot is amazing, it fans out smoothly over the chapters. I was instantly hooked after reading first few chapters. The character development and writing proficiency is good, except for a few grammatical errors here and there. Will readily recommend it to readers if they are interested in sci fi and adventurous plots like this one.Keep up the good work ?
Woah! The story is something new. I don't know if everyone of use noticed this but I feel like the content has sort of a warning for us as human beings. I go deep with each details. <333
For anyone that reads this know that this is amazing, very good pacing, great character interactions and natural development of relationships.A lot of writing techniques that can be copied, I mean learned from this
I finished reading the first 3 chapters. Got to say I like the self-awareness of the MC in the beginning, very easy to follow with the pacing that I think is good on how you pulled it off. A well thought out backstory with said that the MC knows his position and he understands his placement in his old world then suddenly being transported into somewhere he doesn't know is quite surprising for me at least.
This is legendary please continue writingIt .
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New author who could use a little bit of work on his English at times, but that being said it's better than 99% of the stuff on this site already! The majority of the time the author follows a logical progression, and shows the motivations for the characters actions in a way that makes sense and is engaging.I think this author has a lot of potential, and if he had a professional editor on hand this novel would be almost publishable!Keep on writing, keep on practicing, keep on doing your thing!As a piece of advice, you might want to start distancing yourself from readers comments. As your novel gets more and more popular you will eventually attract some trolls, and some very loud negative voices from idiots who don't know what a proper story is, and couldn't write one to save their lives. Make sure not to let them discourage you!
Nice book with amazing plot twist. Has great potential.I would efinitely love to keep reading this .Kudos to the author.Adding it to my library ASAP ?
Excuse what the fuck? All those trash stories or fanfictions that are ranked in the top don't have even 10% of the awesomeness of this story. I don't know how it's still so low in ratings and still unknown to most of the readers. This one has a quite likable MC, whose personality is quite unknown as he gets more powerful he cares about others less and less, that includes his family too. I just hope that later on he won't puss* out and apologizes them. As the story itself has really good quality writing and addicting to read I would suggest everybody give it a try as it has different Mc for a change. Not your usual "Kind-hearted, naive and peace-loving mega puss* retard" Mc. All my power stones are for you author just don't drop it and keep good work. And I like how he distant to others especially humans, so keep that up too. Maybe he should show some care for his sisters when he's already powerful, but not for parents and his clan, they can die for all we readers care.