a novel that focuses solely on a sport? i had already read a novel that focuses on the mc being an actor and the likes... but this is my first sport novel... seems like fun
I think this story has a lot of potential. Key points to look out for:
1) use of dialogue, think you could Make use of more dialogue. the entire story is written in Lincolns thoughts with sparse use of dialogue.
2) character development: The story is too focused on Physical development and has ignored much of lincolns mental development
3) world sEtting: the entire transition to rocks Pirates, the worlD government, strength levels are not too clear Even with the auxiliary chapter
4) Story pace: reading just the first few chapters, it Already the gives the feeling that the story will end in 10-15 chapters max. You want to make sure you have a modest goal in terms of how long this fanfic will be and pace yourself to achieve that goal
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Interesting novel!but I prefer male lead than female lead though.but at the very least this novel is different from the other FL novels.so I tried reading this and yeah I think it's good
Reviewing before reading mostly because it’s not a harem novel. I think I’ve read two harem novels that I consider decent. Five stars for not being trash
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so I pray that you hit the like button and give me my exp
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I'm obviously into videogames on a whole and this book got me fascinated.
The whole background was well described and the story flow is intriguing to be honest..
You've got good work, keep it up
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ALRIGHT.......i want this one! it seems rather good so i hope this gets picked rather quick!..................................................
Skip to the chapter 15... the juicy part starts from there if you're not into the slow pacing.
Author is super wholesome. Makes everything more welcoming compare to the like of "My Vampire/Warewolf System".
I am at Chapter 85 ... I just want the author to know that their are certain Chapters which is not at all needed or the contents of the chapters could have been shorted. Certain chapters is entirely composed of a single conversation between two entities ,eg the Campfire chapter or the four long chapters where the goddess shows the MC about his past , which definitely could have been shorted . Author most of us uses our passes to open the chapters , cause it's not free , And those chapters has to be worthwhile ... of course you can definitely give vivid discriptions and details and I absolutely love it ... But it's not like Chyralisis where chapters are free of Cost ... You are selling the book dear author... Gotta keep that in mind ..
To everyone .. This is a good book with good English and the details of characters and world background is given vividly ... But this story is verrrrrrrrry slow paced ... Sometimes you will lose your cool as I did ... sometimes you will feel that more the Chapter is good but not worth your buck ...
One can give it a shot ...
And for the author.. If you want your Novel to be of High ranked , to get popular, to be acclaimed by your audience and get good pay for your work ... Please see the Chapters is worth the bang ..
Once again it's a good novel .. just certain chapter messes up the Vive ..