Wow this story is comolete and utter GARBAGE. waste of four hours. please pause this story, go on YouTube and learn how to write a story and before you post use Gramerly. The story has a interesting concept but the world building is terrible, not to mention the exposition of a 13yr final exam essay. This story seems like a 13yr with mommy issues that gets bullied at school wrote this. I would say more but the story is so terrible that you would have to pay me to give pointers on the specifics of what you did wrong. I'm mainly angry that I wastes my 2hr of my time on this but. But if I didn't tell you your story is trash you'd have a whole bunch of yes men enabling you stagnation as a writer
the story is nice but it seems to jump in places, causing the story to seem choppy.and what are even the dollsand if you explain the purpose of events it might help it flow easier
The world building and the characers are really good. Also, the writing is spectacular, too. The way of narrating is very engulfing, so much so that I find myself completely focused on the story very often. Try it, it's really good.
It's actually relatively good, as trial reads go. Be warned however: large portions of this novel will be nonsensical or unsuited to other parts of the novel. Examples include the nonsense that is his only attack skill, the fact that literally nothing he does costs any resource, his obsession with equipment over skills, the general lack of sense with stats, and the entire setup surrounding those stupid "death soldiers". This is not the author's fault, but rather the fault of the transcriber, who has changed major portions of this story and added random stuff in to pad out the differences in order to avoid copyright infringement while copy pasting almost literally everything else without regard to whether it makes sense to leave it that way. In the original story the MC actually does have an SSS talent which removes resource costs, is a mage who can fuse skills together, and doesn't even posess a system at all much less a horde of soldiers to murder his enemies for him. A lot of scenes will make much more sense if you keep in mind that the original author didn't have him as an invincible tank with an army.
Another story with an interesting premise but bad writing. The author doesn’t understand the concept of flow, so the writing is very choppy as a result. And the writing itself seems like it was probably written by a young teen. I would recommend passing on this one.
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good ??????...I want her ...very goodgood novel..................,.....................nice
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If you like vampires, overpowered mc then what are you waiting for go read the novel. Right now this novel only has few chapters but i can guarantee that you'll get hooked only after few chapters if you're a fan of this genre. Really waiting for new chapters. Till now great work author.
Locked ch 4 and up = instant delete from library good book but until they stop being stupid... (delete)...........................................................................................
This book is really dumb, the MC gains the ability to just change people's choices on things but we don't actually get to see the choices. The book will talk about how "number 1 is bad and number 3 is the best option" but it never tells you what those options are so it's super frustrating to read
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